BLUE_FAIRY : THE HEROINE'S BEST FRIEND

Characters. Yejin (OC), Seolhee (OC), Infinite
Status. Completed
Description.
In my story, there’s a pretty girl named Seolhee.
She turns heads wherever she does, charming everyone with her natural personality. Pretty and kind, I made her the leading lady.

What if I tell you the main star for today is NOT Seolhee?
 

STORY TITLE. 3/5

While your title is not novel, I did think that it fit well with your piece! It embodies all your major themes and it’s cute and quirky – which is exactly this story. However, as I have already mentioned, I do not find it particularly appealing nor creative so for that, I will have to take off marks.
 

DESCRIPTION, FOREWORD & TAGS. 10/10

Your description and forward are really interesting!! You leave a lot for the readers to wonder about as you end off the sections in questions, which I think is really effective overall! You’ve also brought in the “cliché” element quite early on, but then introduce your own twist to it – this is me complimenting you because I think you’ve done well.

A small correction: you ended off with “so do I” which I don’t think is quite appropriate. Rather, I’d suggest you to change it to “So am I” if that small quote is indeed an answer to the question you had written above.

A quick browse to your tags… they look perfectly fine to me! All in all, great job in this section!
 

APPEARANCE: GRAPHICS. 5/5, LAYOUT. 5/5

Your poster is absolutely adorable and fits in with your overall theme well! With the way you’ve titled your chapters, in addition to your poster and layout, it’s quite obvious that you’re going for the television/movie theme from the get go. You’ve utilized these aspects well straight from the start so well done!
 

CHARACTERISATION. 11/15

This piece has many many many characters (up to a point where I was feeling quite overwhelmed). I was thinking of focusing in on one or two, but instead, I will speak about your characters in general.

The one thing I do appreciate is that all of your characters stay true from the beginning all the way until the end, which I assume is quite tricky because you have so many people to keep track of! However, your characters are also not extremely dynamic. I wish you could have made them more distinct from each other, but rather it they fit your typical roles. As I was reading, I wanted to discover something about the character which I have not seen before, or that I have never encountered based on the stereotype. You do well to explain why characters feel a certain way so there are no loopholes when it comes to that. But as a final general comment, I did find the characters to be mediocre. As a plot driven story, characters play a big role. Your plot is complex and I was expecting your characters to be the same.
 

PLOT. 18/20

The entire piece plays on the fact of how “clichéd” everything is supposed to be. So as “interest”, I would say that it falls a little short since you are reusing typical plotlines and events. That being said, I do think you did well in writing out the plot. It could have been boring and uninteresting because you’re not bringing anything new to the table, but your writing style and just the way things are planned out kept me reading until the end.

As for realism, I think you did well. I’m honestly in awe of how you managed to keep on top of all the different stories you have created for each character while staying true to your overarching plot. Kudos to you for planning it all out!
 

CONSISTENCY/FLOW. 7/10

Honestly, I think the pace of your story is a little too slow for me. As the central genre is a “slice of life” type of piece, I really was craving more as I was reading. Something that will make me go “oh! What happened?” In terms of this, you do leave