Hidden In The Shadows - jackieway
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Hidden In The Shadows: jackieway
Reviewer: tyrhfjd Story Title- 5/5: It's intriguing and diverse/distinctive from others, eye-catching as well. Summary/Description- 5/5: It's interesting to read about and it wasn't bland and it didn't give the plot away. Story Layout- 5/5: The poster adds a nice touch/visual to the story. The layout was easy to read, nothing complicated nor all over the place. Grammar Spelling- 15/20: ".. finally reaching the highest point, a tall, faded red slide that wound around a towering tree." It should've been the towering tree because she is talking about the tree she climbed, not some random tree. "Umma and Appa said that I can't come here anymore." It should've been mom and dad because supposedly they are speaking Korean already, leaving it the way you wrote it means that she said mom and dad in Korean but the rest in English. (Did that make sense? Haha) "Me and Sungmin and Sunjin have to go to the United States every summer to learn English instead." It should be Sungmin, Sunjin, and I, for propper grammar. "Awwww, you're so cute when you do that, Kyu!" Too many w's to be grammatically correct. Numbers under ten should be spelled out, numbers beginning or ending sentences should be spelled out also. "And that you'll miss me as much as I'm gonna miss you." It should be going to miss, to be grammatically corr
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