The Completed Chapter - sweetsonata
The Casting Director Review Shop (Busy/Closed/Hiatus)The Completed Chapter by sweetsonata
Story Title - 5 out of 5
I like how it ties into the ending, it makes it that much more impactful.
Description/Foreword - 4 out of 5
There are no problems with your description, although the foreword somewhat bothered me. There were too many bolded words, if you emphasized less it would have more of a dramatic effect. (If that's what you were going for).
Story Layout - 5 out of 5
There are no problems here.
Grammar/Spelling - 18 out of 20
Not many problems, although I found some sentences to be worded strangely. For example this particular one, "You see, back then, I was super clueless about how the existence of relationships really worked." I know what you're trying to say, however phrased like this is referring that you're wondering how relationships exist in the world. I'm sure you meant she doesn't understand how relationships are like, (correct me if I'm wrong), but in this way it doesn't sound quite right.
Story Plot/Flow/Description - 30 out of 30
Throughout
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