Your Sky Is Sorrowful - peejrin
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Story Title - 4/5
The title gave a really sad and blue feels. This title can mean many things such as death, angels, guardian, hate, mistreated, or any of the angst calorgy.
Summary/Description - 5/5
Your description gave a good brief summary of what's in the story and what's going to happen to the characters. You pull out a nice way to start the introduction and grabbed readers attentions quickly with the word 'other side', 'ghost', and 'sorrow'.
Story Layout*- 4/5
Having blue for the poster is understandable since is goes with the title. But this is a ghostau! which has a bit of angst and dark and sorrow feels to the mood so you might want to have some darker colors as the background or in the poster.
Your second poster and the other posters however, are better theme colored. It matches the mood of this story.
Grammar/Spelling - 10/20
There are a lot of misused of puntcuations mostly commas. It's understandable that commas are difficult to deal with but you might want a beta-reader to check over it.
You also have a bit of problem with your words choice and sometimes past and present tense.
Example: Azra was searching for Hyemi at the same room before but didn’t found anyone.
Correction: Azra was searching for Hyemi at the same room before but couldn't find anyone.
Also, don't use the three dots as a continuing sentence for dialogue or in the middle of the senten
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