Plot: Already reviewed plot last time :)

Grammar:uhuhuuhhh I'm crying! Your writing has gotten much, much better! (So proud!) <3 Buuuut.. since you got better, I'm gonna be more picky! Be ready! Parts of your story still seem to have awkward phrasing that doesn't have any value to the style of your story. In those cases, have your beta-reader fix the phrasing. Despite your grammar being better, there are also some places in which your tenses are still not best. OVerall, I'd say, while general grammar has improved a lot, tell your beta-reader to fix even the tiniest detail, because in general isn't enough; it needs to be 100% to get the love that you really want.

Style: You have a general style that writers usually have, and it's good! Nice job here! However, some of the times, your word usage is too strong and wildly out of context. Have your beta-reader educate you on these mistakes. As you may already know though, sometimes English words will mean that same thing but emphasize more. For example, mad and furios. While both words mean to be angry, mad is a less emphaizing word that furious is. 

Flow and Pace:Since for now your story is quite on the shorter side, I can't really say anything. However, based on the little bit your have right now, I think your pacing is not too fast nor slow. I especially like how it fits in with the chapter names too. Your chapter names make the flow better too. 

Overall Enjoyment: I like this overall, as I said last time. The only tip that I would really have is to improve on word usage. That's the only thing that stuck out to me. Maybe if you have time, improve your vocabulary and make the story pop.