Story: Ashes: What's Left Of Us

Author: CrystalxDoLL

Genre: Angst

Reviewer: bibim-bap

Title: [5/5] You’re story title is great! It’s both interesting, eye-grabbing, and totally fits the theme of the story. “Ashes: What’s Left of Us” totally gives the reader a good idea of what type of story it is. In your case, a tragedy story of a broken heart. 

Appearance: [10/10] I think you did really good with the appearance. The poster and the background really went well together and the way you organized your writing was great. There isn’t much to say other than that so good job!

Description/Foreword: [6/10] The description was really well-written. But, frankly, your description looked like you summarized the whole one-shot altogether. You told about how Ha Yi went paranoid but was awakened by a dream she always had. In other words, you told both the and the downfall/solution of the story.
The foreword was kept as it should’ve been, short. You placed the author’s note there and nothing else, so I won’t put anything against you there. 

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