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Story: At the end of the rainbow
Author: EggPuddi
Genre: Romance, Light Angst
Reviewer: bibim-bap
Title: [4/5] HOLY- OMG- STOP- Just, such a great title. It fit so perfectly with the rest of the story. Oh, but my dear, please capitalize! Rather than “At the end of the rainbow”, it should be “At the End of the Rainbow”
Appearance: [10/10] your appearance was great – kept simple. The poster looked really good (though, it could’ve used a rainbow but…). You had no background so I have no say on that and the overall neatness of your writing was great.
Description/Foreword: [8/10] the description seemed a little bit of a blur to me. I couldn’t technically pinpoint what was going on and why it was happening. Your description just needs a little bit more of oomph – something that would capture readers because, all the attention is centered on the description. You want readers to automatically click the ‘next’ button. Because, your story
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