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Title : 꽃 Flower

Reviewer : sweet_chocolate98

 

First Impression

When I saw the title , I thought it would be a sad story about a girl who had a terrible past.. But , when I look into all the chapters , I get the unexpected.. The story came out nice.. 

 

Title 

I like the way you put the korean word there.. I understand that 'Kim Soyoung' means a beautiful flower.. But in the story , you didn't talk much about that characteristic... It somehow potrayed sadness and it fits the story well..

 

Graphics 

OMG! I like the poster and the background! I love it so much!! I like how Sehun look at the OC in the poster and the korean word in the poster.. it's JUST SO WOAH! It somehow fits the story well.. I like it very much~

 

Description and Foreword

About your description , it's simple and short which I like it.. But when the part , "But in the end, I am only a flower.” I hope you add more like what a flower had been through.. Like being stepped on or being picked or being tortured.. And about your foreword , adding more colours should make the story more inter

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darkclov3r #1
Hi there;

Chaptered story / one-shot: Chaptered story

Author's username: darkclov3r

Author link: Chaptered story / one-shot:

Author's username: darkclov3r

Author link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/595333

Story title: The Primary; The Secondary

Story link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/748326/the-primary-the-secondary-angst-crime-exoshidae-baeksica-kaisica

Short description of your story: My days are called Primary and Secondary. To remind and punish me for being a malevolent sister.

Chapter count (for those with more than one chapter only): 2

Genre: angst,slideoflife,tragedy

Story contains M-rated scenes: No

Status: On-going

Reviewer : AzHiie

What you want to be focused on: pace, grammar-wise

Password: bibimbap

Thanks in advance.