Title : Being Afflicated

Reviewer : Taehyung (christine3006)

[ WARNING:  This review is particularly harsh and if you can not take critiscm, I suggest that you do not read this review. Do not take anything here personal, it is only my review opinions. But I think I praised your story too somehow cx ]

First impression 

Yes! I really fell in love with your story in my first sight, ohoho:3. Especially its starring Jin and BTS and one of the tag, which is "angst". And the sentence "These afflictions; they're the reason I'm in love" really catches my eyes and grew curiousity in your story, especially after reading your foreword that stated about her unknown dream, goodjob!

Story title 

The title that you're using is really rare and mysterious at the same time. As I went through the story, the title and the story are match. so yeah, excellent!

Graphics 

The graphics that you're using isn't really bright and dark. So yep, you got no problem in the graphics *thumbs up*

Description and foreword 

They're simple but meaningful, it attracts most of the readers. Yes, some of the readers will have problems in the definition and thumbs up for you since you placed the general definition and the character's p.o.v for the definition. It makes the readers easily get the meaning of the word. Especially you made the review part where you got so many praises from the reviewer. Tbh, if I'm the reader, I'll definitely read all the praises especially most of them are great so the readers might click on the first chapter to find out why you got so many praises, ohohoho:3

Plot / flow / originality

I never read any story like this plot before but its great! Its not that fast and not that slow, average:) But you hanged her drawing's mystery for 2 chapters, in my opinion, you should've tell the answer in the next chapter but yeah, its cool tho~ 

Grammar / writing style

I can't really find your grammar mistakes tbh and yes, thumbs up again for you cx

Will be using italic for additional word and bold for correction

chapter 4

original : "Calling out to her, his attempt at getting her attention..."

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