Title: Stupid, Crazy Mistake

Reviewed by: exoexoexolellel

{{WARNING:  This review is particularly harsh and if you can not take critiscm, I suggest that you do not read this review. Do not take anything here personal, it is only my review opinion.}}

First impression (3/5)

Your title sounded interesting, though the comma told me maybe your grammar isn't the best. The the big turn off for me were the colours you used in your description. They were a little blinding for my eyes.

Story title (5/10)

As I said earlier, I don't think the comma is necessary. However, you are 22 chapters in your story and I do not see the relevance of your title. Your description tells me it's set in the perspective of Daesom and I'm guessing she chose Sehun over Luhan? My point is, just how long are you going to prolong the period of where you connect the title with the story?

Graphics (3/5)

The graphic is cute and shows fluff, though it looks a little plain. The background is simple which is good, but the words are cut off so a minus for that.

Description and foreword (9/10)

I like the brief description you display. I don't like the colours but quotes from the story is always a pull in for me.

Just a little error:

"I should have told you the truth at the first place!"

It should be:

"I should have told you the truth in the first place!"

The trailers are good, it sparked an interest in me.

Plot / flow / originality (17/20)

You did an overall alright job in this category. The plot is definitely interesting, though I am confused. The way you portrayed Jo Min before we met her was as if she was dead.

"She's gone."

But she's alive now?

It's intriguing that once we see who Luhan really was to Daesom, Sehun comes in. I totally ship Jinu and Hanbyul. 

The flow to me felt like it was a little forced. Trying to shove so many events in one chapter can be a little overwhelming for the reader. It's not totally crooked though.

I think the story is pretty original. There are many fanfics starring one of the characters being a victim of amnesia but the way you have twisted your events in the story definitely strikes it as a unique fanfiction.

Grammar (16/20)

You did poorly in this category and I have to admit, if I wasn't reviewing this story I would have left after reading the first chapter. Grammar is what I excel at and it is only typical of me to be mean like this. English not your firs