Dinner ^^

Is this fate or a dream ?

 

"I gained weight again" I sighed 

"Isn’t that a good thing" Donghae asked 

"Yea but... I'm gonna look super fat after the babies are born" I said 

"You could just work out in the gym, can't you?" 

"I didn't think about that" I laughed 

"What’s your schedule for the next few days?" I asked 

"I'm doing a photo shoot for a magazine and then afterwards I have to go on set to film a drama... Why?" 

"Hmm I was just wondering” I said 

"Hey, has Minhyuk begun talking yet?" he asked 

"Yea, he called me Umma a couple of minutes ago" 

The thing is, after the day he got a cold, Minhyuk hadn’t spoken a word and was very very scared of everyone around him, even me. But it's been a couple of days since then and he's beginning to warm up not only that but Minhyuk has also brought Donghae and I closer. 

"Minhyuk ah, call me appa please" Donghae pouted at the child 

Minhyuk who was so concentrated on drawing refused to even look at Donghae 

"What’s that Min?" 

"Pamily" he said 

"OMO Donghae he spoke he spoke" I said sounding like a fan girl 

"I know I know I saw" he said sounding jus as excited 

Minhyuk was looking at us weirdly 

"Minhyuk ah! You’re an artist! I can't even draw this good" I said pouting 

He gave me a shy smile 

"Aigoo he is so cute"

"DINERS READY!!" 

"let’s go eat" I said as Donghae picked Minhyuk up 

We had gotten closer and only then did I realize that I loved Donghae. I wasn't just thankful to him for accepting me; I loved him because he was a sweet and caring person who I can depend on. 

Ah~ if only he felt the same way

"Unnie waegure?" Alex asked 

I shook my head "nothing" I smiled 

"Ahhhh I'm hungry" I heard Leeteuk say as he sat down 

Donghae looked absolutly adorable trying to make Minhyuk eat carrot- NO HAE MI STOP HE DOESN'T LIKE YOU BACK 

I feel like I slapped myself TT.TT 

"Unnie are you okay?"

"Yea im fine" I laughed and began eating 

"You five! Your food is always daebak (awesome)" I said reffering to Uki, Alex, Sammy, Hangeng and Ryeowook

We all laughed and ate in harmony ^^ 

Short chappie but meh XD 

this story is getting to long 

i think imma end it soon 

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PhinkLipsThick #1
Chapter 40: So good! I want a sequel! Fighting authornim!
peiyan #2
Chapter 21: ermm.. may i know the song by ryeowook?
Hawaianlocomoco #3
Chapter 8: omg im so confuse with the story with so many names!!!
sulminnie #4
Chapter 40: i really had fun with your fanfic.. :) the story is good and the sequencing is all nice and arranged.thanks..keep on writing :)
sulminnie #5
Chapter 28: super love the pics and gifs..:) <3
sulminnie #6
Chapter 3: well, i guess elfs will not going to hurt girls who will be loved by any members of super junior :)
ch3nya #7
Chapter 40: :D i loved this i couldnt stop reading once i started
KKyungMi #8
Chapter 40: So.. this is over. I'm gonna miss it a lot... i never thought i was gonna love this story so much but it was beautiful. Thank you so much.
KeyLovaSHINeeForeva #9
POVs:

I advise that you avoid changing POVs in first-person. First-person is meant for one person's thoughts only. First-person omniscient IS possible, but it's rare, and third-person omniscient would make things flow much more smoothly. The sharp and detached changed POVs between each person does not allow for smooth transitions to pass through. Also, when denoting locations, please use sentences in place of using "@ _____'s House", "At The Restaurant", etc.

Vocabulary:

Please avoid including computer language in the fic. If you wish to use Korean, do as your desire commands. Lol. I personally don't to exemplify the beauties and extravagance of English, plus barely of the people on here are Korean. (Note: There is no such thing as "Bwoh?". LOLOL. It's just "Mwoh?".) Your vocabulary has been getting so much better lately, and it shows in the character descriptions of your Foreword. Please fuse those same big words into your story! (: Both the readers and I will love it! (Plus, it makes you look intelligent. Hehe.)

Flow:

I'm kind of confused on this part. Sometimes, it seems as though there are two completely different stories going on with the same people. Otherwise, the flow feels fine. However, I would love it if you would expand upon what the characters are preparing for and how they reach it instead of moving to a completely different scene to start a new plot.

Overall, this story is humorous, enjoyable, and noteworthy, but fixing the grammar would really help gain more professional subscribers (by professional I mean good writers and all). I laughed, I smiled, I took relish in the occasional moments of peace. But for now, this story needs a continuation. Go write!

(P.S. To conclude, I'd like to mention my astonishment at your ability to update so consistently. I am SO temperamental when it comes to writing. It all depends on my mood, fatigue level, and willing to sit for five hours and write, but knowing that you can update so quickly inspires me.)
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