You guys are so sweet

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Hae-mi POV 
 
I think I'll go crazy, no insane in a few minutes. As long as he's not near me, it's okay. It’s okay. 
 
Donghae squeezed my hard, telling me its okay. I smiled, 
 
Donghae's kind, he's giving me so much despite knowing nothing about me. He's nicer, and kinder than that little scum bag over there, incomparable. I like Donghae a lot more than I ever loved Jiyong
 
Uki came inside with at-least nine gift bags 
 
"What’s going on?" I asked curiously
 
"Something~" she replied
 
"Donghae its okay, I'll be casual" I whispered 
 
"Okay, give me a...... A wink if you feel uncomfortable" he whispered back
 
"Kumawo I think I'll be fine" I said kissing his cheek. 
 
"Woah Woah Woah can someone explain to me what's going on?" Void said looking extremely confused 
 
NO ONE POV 
 
(Before Big Bang came over to the Super Junior dorm) 
 
Ring ring ring ring ring 
 
"Yeobuseyo?" a voice asked
 
"Ah Seungri? Is that you?" another voice replied
 
"Nae" Seungri answered 
 
"It’s me Uki" Uki said 
 
"Hey Uki" 
 
"Do you guys want to come over for dinner?" 
 
"Let’s go out for diner" 
 
"With all of super junior and big bang? Plus a couple of others?" 
 
"Never mind, I'll ask them if they can, I know I can" 
 
"Yay" 
 
"Guys, it's Uki, she's inviting us over for diner" Seungri said at the other guys in the living room  
 
"Let’s go let’s go" 
 
"Wake Jiyong up!!" Seunghyun (TOP) said 
 
"Okay I think that's a yes, what time should we come?" Seungri said turning back to the phone 
 
"At around 11:30" 
 
"Perfect, we don't have anything scheduled at that time"
 
"I'm glad you could come" 
 
"How many people are going to be there?" 
 
"Let’s see, all super junior members so 14 (minus Kangin) and the managers so 18 and then you guys so 23 and then there are two other girls so 25 and then void and I so 27 people" 
 
"Oh my"
 
"Ha-ha, oh did you hear about Donghae’s wife?" 
 
"Yea" 
 
"Ha-ha she'll be there too" 
 
"Yay I get to meet her" 
 
"Ha-ha yea, Im going to go prepare diner" 
 
"But it's only 7" 
 
"Do you remember how many people are coming?”
 
"Oh yea" 
 
"We were planning a surprise congratulatory party for Donghae and Hae-mi so they don't know you’ll be coming" 
 
"Ha-ha okay I'll keep that in mind" 
 
"11:30" 
 
"11:30" 
 
"Im going to hang up" 
 
"Okay, bye" 
 
"Jiyong, were going to head out at 11:30 for diner" 
 
"Okay" he said as he yawned 
 
"Did you hear about Donghae’s engagement?" 
 
"Yea, I heard, I was in the same building as the conference room when it happened" Jiyong said
 
"Anyone know the girl" 
 
"Nope" 
 
"I heard she's not a celebrity” 
 
"Yea. She isn't" 
 
"Jiyong do you know her?" 
 
"My ex apparently"
 
"Really???" 
 
"Uhuh" 
 
"What happened?"
 
"Don’t really know. Remember how I lived in the states for a while? I met her there, we went out and then she left me without any notice" 
 
"Heartbroken?"
 
"Who do you think Heart breaker was for?" 
 
"Hahaha nice one" 
 
"No like legit, it was made by the feelings I had for her, I wrote the lyrics as soon as she left" 
 
"Whatttt?" 
 
"Oh god if I had known I would've declined saying we have a schedule or Something Miyan" 
 
"It’s okay, gotta get over her someday" 
 
Everyone nodded their heads
 
"Let’s buy presents, can't just go over empty handed"
 
"Yea" 
 
"What should we buy?"
 
"Call Uki and ask her" 
 
"Okay" 
 
Ring ring ring ring ring 
 
"Ha-ha perfect timing" 
 
"Yeobuseyo?"
 
"Ah its Uki again is Seungri there?"
 
"Yea, this is Seungri"
 
"Oh um, I'm guessing your probably wondering about what to get them"
 
"Yep" 
 
"Get them anything but alcohol and wine. I don't want they're child to have problems" 
 
"Child?"
 
"It’s um, a, Donghae’s wife to be is pregnant with his child" 
 
".... WHAT" 
 
"Shhh pretend I didn't tell you that. Seungri if any of the other guys get the news, your dead" 
 
"...okay"
 
"Bye"
 
"Oh bye" 
 
 
Still in shock, Seungri headed back to his seat on the sofa
 
"She told us not to bring alcohol or wine" 
 
"Why?"
 
"I don't know"
 
"Let’s go shopping online!"
 
"For what?"
 
"For them!" 
 
"Oh" 
 
~ Time passes and it's already 11:00.~ 
 
"do you guys have everything?"
 
"yea~" everyone replied 
 
"then let's head out" 
 
BigBang got to Super Juniors dorms at 11:25 and were at their door at exactly 11:30. 
 
"I want to knock" 
 
"Okay okay"
 
Knock knock
 
"Dugusaeyo"
 
"It’s Big bang" 
 
The door opened 
 
"Who are you "an old lady said? 
 
"Ah jisonghaeyo, we came to the wrong door"
 
"It’s okay, thank god I wasn’t sleeping” 
 
"Nae jisongmida"
 
"Then, goodbye" 
 
"Nae, goodbye" we all said as the door closed.
 
"Aish I’ve never been so awkward in my life" 
 
"No, there were other times too, you just..." Daesung said and Seungri glared at him.
 
"Well, I'll call Uki now" Daesung said 
 
"Wait. What floor is this?" Seungri asked  
 
"The 2nd floor" top said
 
"That’s why!" Seungri exclaimed
 
"They live on the 10 floor" 
 
"Ohhhh" the group exclaimed, and walked toward the elevator 
 
"Why does an old lady need such a big apartment?" Daesung asked curiously 
 
"I... Have absolutely no idea" Seungri said 
 
Taeyang just shook his head no. 
 
Ding
 
They finally got to the 10th floor and knocked on the door (A/N the entire floor was for super junior) 
 
"Dugusaeyo?" a voice asked 
 
"Pizza delivery" 
 
"Seungri?" Jiyong said 
 
"What?" 
 
"They live over here"
 
"..." 
 
"Ha-ha Seungri, you and your awkward moments" 
 
"Hey!" 
 
"Hey" Seungri said as they went in
 
"Here sit down; diner will be ready in about thirty more minutes" 
 
"okay" the five boys said as they sat down
 
Soon everyone began talking to one another, everyone except Jiyong, he was in a conversation with siwon but he kept looking at Hae-mi. 
 
"Siwon, who’s that?" Jiyong faked not knowing Hae-mi 
 
"Oh that's Donghae’s wife, Hae-mi. Wanna go say hi?" 
 
"Sure" Jiyong said following Siwon 
 
"Hae-mi" siwon said as he tapped her shoulder
 
"Hae-mi, this is my hyung, Jiyong" 
 
"Oh um hi. I'm Hae-mi" she said with a fake smile
 
"Hey, I'm Jiyong" 
 
"Hae-mi, come over here I need your help" 
 
"Excuse me" 
 
"So back to what I was saying, have you been to the new church they made?" 
 
"Huh? Oh um no?" 
 
"Oh really, I want to go sometime soon" 
 
Knock knock ~ 
 
"Dugusaeyo?" Kyuhyun and Henry asked 
 
"It’s Yunho and Changmin oh and Jaejoong Junsu and Yoochun just came" 
 
"HYUNG" Kyuhyun said opening the door letting the guests in. Everyone continued chatting and playing around until another knock came 
 
"Dugusaeyo"
 
"SHINee" 
 
"Key!!!" Hae-mi and Alex said in unison, as Alex opened the door to let the boys in
 
"Uki how many others are coming over?" 
 
"How many people are here?" 
 
"1...2...3...4...5...6...24... 36" 
 
"Good, that should be everyone. Guys I need your attention" Uki said 
Everyone stopped what they were doing and looked in her direction. 
 
"Today, Alex, Sammy and I, decided to give Donghae and Hae-mi a party, for one, getting engaged and two, having their first child" she said and then started clapping 
 
"Uki, this is too much" Hae-mi said shyly 
 
"Ani, it’s special to all of us" 
 
"Kumawo" 
 
What?! She's pregnant? I thought she just gained weight!! Jiyong thought 
 
A cake rolled in from the kitchen
 
"Oh my sweat heavens, Uki this really is too much" Hae-mi said looking at the really tall cake 
 
"No it's not, now let's enjoy!"
 
"Cut the cake"
 
Hae-mi and Donghae cut the cake and fed it to each other. 
 
"Thank you everyone for coming, please enjoy" 
 
"Oh and one more announcement" Donghae said 
 
"Is it about the gender of your baby?" 
 
"Babies, their twins and it looks like one’s a girl and one’s a boy" Donghae said putting his hand on Hae-mi's shoulder
 
"Omo chincha? When did you find out?” Yesung asked 
 
"I found out today a little while ago" Hae-mi said 
 
"chuka-hae" Kangin said clapping 
 
"Thank you" 
 
"Guys foods ready" Alex said 
 
Everyone practically raced to the dinner table for food
 
Hae-mi pov 
 
I can just feel the stares I'm getting from him. I feel a chill run down my spine, thankfully Donghae knows my situation, it's funny how I don’t know him that well yet he already know a secret I haven't told anyone. 
 
"Celebrities eat a lot more that you think" Donghae said after grabbing two platefuls of food. 
 
"Kumawo" I said taking the plate
 
Uki, Alex and Sammy had set up a table long and wide enough to fit all of us, Donghae and I sat at the far end and everyone else filled in the seats. Out of all the people in this dorm, Jiyoung sat infront of me. How surprising. I actually know his personality very, very well, so well I can predict his next move. I knew this was going to happen, and Later he's going to come up to me and ask to talk in private with me. 
 
But forget him and all that, I looked down at my food. Craving. I was craving this. For how long? Two hours maybe? I don't know, I just know I want to eat it so bad. I can feel my mouth water as I look at the juicy, tender looking bulgogi, I slowly put some in my mouth, I chewed slowly.
I realized Uki waiting for me
 
"Is it good" Uki asked
 
"I... Have never... Tasted... Bulgogi... Better than this!" I answered truthfully 
 
"Really??”
 
"Yea, it's really good, it's just right. And i was craving it too"
 
"Ha-ha then continue eating" 
 
"Take some for yourself" 
 
I swear we ate like there was no tomorrow.
 
"Guys here comes desert" 
 
"Ha-ha that reminds me of the time on Exploration of the Human Body Sungmin, Donghae and I ate so much food but still had enough room for the dessert!" 
 
"Oh yea, ha-ha I remember now"
 
As soon as it was set, everyone attacked the table like it was gold. I was eating a piece of the cake Uki either made or ordered for Donghae and I. Those girls are the sweetest people I've met; they already treat me like family. 
 
"Uki did you make this?" Donghae asked
 
"All of us made it while you were at the doctor’s appointment with Hae-mi" 
 
My eyes widened. I swear tears were welling up, I don't know why, I feel so touched by this
 
"Uki" I said hugging her
 
"Kumawo, I really really appreciate it" I said as a tear ran down my cheek, 
 
"Kumawo" I whispered again
 
"Unni? What's wrong? Are you crying? Don't cry! Did it taste bad? Is something wrong?" Alex panicked
 
"Ani, I'm alright, im just so happy. You don't know how much this means to me" 
 
No response, she must be confused. I would explain it to her, but there’s like 40 people here. I smiled, wiped away my tears, I felt like the happiest person in the world 
 
"You guys are so sweet"
 
"Kumawo" they said 
 
Soon it was time for everyone to leave 
 
"Bye, see you guys" we said 
 
"Thank you for having us over bye" the rest simply said 
 
"Nuna come visit sometimes" tae min said 
 
"Of course I will, don't forget about tomorrow though" 
 
"I would never; we'll be here at 12:15 okay"
 
"Okay, bye" I said as I smiled 
 
"Hey, um Hae-mi, can we talk?" Jiyong asked. Donghae was about to speak up, but I cut him off. 
 
"Sure, now?" I said raising my eye brows
 
"Um yea, it's kind of private so not here though" 
 
"Rooftop?" 
 
"Okay" 
 
I walked up to Donghae 
 
"I got this" I whispered with a smirk
 
"I'm going to be right here if you need me" 
 
I hugged him "Kumawo" I said as I grabbed my jacket and walked upstairs to the rooftop entrance  

did this chapter make sense? i kinda feel like it didnt =P

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PhinkLipsThick
#1
Chapter 40: So good! I want a sequel! Fighting authornim!
peiyan #2
Chapter 21: ermm.. may i know the song by ryeowook?
Hawaianlocomoco
#3
Chapter 8: omg im so confuse with the story with so many names!!!
sulminnie #4
Chapter 40: i really had fun with your fanfic.. :) the story is good and the sequencing is all nice and arranged.thanks..keep on writing :)
sulminnie #5
Chapter 28: super love the pics and gifs..:) <3
sulminnie #6
Chapter 3: well, i guess elfs will not going to hurt girls who will be loved by any members of super junior :)
ch3nya #7
Chapter 40: :D i loved this i couldnt stop reading once i started
KKyungMi
#8
Chapter 40: So.. this is over. I'm gonna miss it a lot... i never thought i was gonna love this story so much but it was beautiful. Thank you so much.
KeyLovaSHINeeForeva
#9
POVs:

I advise that you avoid changing POVs in first-person. First-person is meant for one person's thoughts only. First-person omniscient IS possible, but it's rare, and third-person omniscient would make things flow much more smoothly. The sharp and detached changed POVs between each person does not allow for smooth transitions to pass through. Also, when denoting locations, please use sentences in place of using "@ _____'s House", "At The Restaurant", etc.

Vocabulary:

Please avoid including computer language in the fic. If you wish to use Korean, do as your desire commands. Lol. I personally don't to exemplify the beauties and extravagance of English, plus barely of the people on here are Korean. (Note: There is no such thing as "Bwoh?". LOLOL. It's just "Mwoh?".) Your vocabulary has been getting so much better lately, and it shows in the character descriptions of your Foreword. Please fuse those same big words into your story! (: Both the readers and I will love it! (Plus, it makes you look intelligent. Hehe.)

Flow:

I'm kind of confused on this part. Sometimes, it seems as though there are two completely different stories going on with the same people. Otherwise, the flow feels fine. However, I would love it if you would expand upon what the characters are preparing for and how they reach it instead of moving to a completely different scene to start a new plot.

Overall, this story is humorous, enjoyable, and noteworthy, but fixing the grammar would really help gain more professional subscribers (by professional I mean good writers and all). I laughed, I smiled, I took relish in the occasional moments of peace. But for now, this story needs a continuation. Go write!

(P.S. To conclude, I'd like to mention my astonishment at your ability to update so consistently. I am SO temperamental when it comes to writing. It all depends on my mood, fatigue level, and willing to sit for five hours and write, but knowing that you can update so quickly inspires me.)