Pink_Melody's Review :)
Love Letter For YouCredits all go to Pink_Melody for reviewing my story. :)
This is my 1st story, so I was happy and content with my score.
Don't worry, I'll make sure to improve in the future!
There's a few new stories I have in mind, but I'll post them here only after I finish this story. ;)
Okay, here's Pink_Melody's Review! :
Review for Choi-Minju-Nikka
Story: Love Letter For You
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Title: The title was very common; however it had a ‘cute feel’ to it. It was an okay title, but try to be more creative next time. I gave you a few more marks because the title was based on the title of a song. (8/15)
Plot/Storyline: I enjoyed the plot very much! It’s a new plot to me and it’s very unique. I loved how you incorporated the ‘snail mail’ type of effect into the story. I like the love triangle~ Keep up the good work! (18/20)
Grammar: Overall, the spelling was great. I found a few grammatical mistakes, but not too many. (For example, in Jonghyun’s reply letter to Nikka in chapter two: “I hope you read this in time of your birthday”. This does not make sense. It would be better if you said, “I hope you read this in time for your birthday” or “I hope you get to read this before your birthday”.) Avoid using emoticons such as “^^, XD, -_-“etc, in your story unless it is completely necessary. (e.g: in text messages, etc.) (8/10)
Poster/Appeal: Full marks from me because I made the poster. -.-;; I believe you really made the story appealing, so congrats! (15/15)
Originality: I thought the story was very original. Well done. (4/5)
Forewords: The forewords were good. I liked how you gave a sneak peek of the story to grab the reader’s attention. You also put in some comedy, which was very well done. I did not give you full marks because you didn’t really explain the characters or their personalities much. Next time, try to describe the characters and their personalities. (10/15)
Flow: I thought the flow was great; however I believe you should have slowed it down just a bit. I’m pretty impatient about when the main characters develop feelings for each other, so I really shouldn’t be talking...n.n;; (4/5)
Bonus Marks: I gave you full marks for making the story a romance/comedy (my favourite genre), making Key oppa another main character (LUV HIM) and adding SHINee as the characters. (As you can see, I subscribed. XD) (5/5)
Total Enjoyment: Full MARKS for enjoyment! I really enjoyed your story and I’m looking forward to reading your other stories and the ending of the story!(10/10)
Total: Very well done. I really enjoyed your fanfiction, and I look forward to reading your other stories. Thank you for requesting and I hope you improve! ^^ (82/100)
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