41/90 KangminBread - Fall In Love With Me In Seven Days

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Fall In Love With Me In Seven Days
written by KangminBread
reviewed by JulieCavi

 

Title: 7/10
It is a really long title. I mean you kind of incorporated it into your story which is really cool and all, but still. Now on a personal note, it would have been funny if you had the title as Seven Days, you know like the grudge lol, then it would’ve seemed like a horror. Oh well. Anyways, yes, long title.

 

Plot: 10/35

                3/5: Originality
                It’s a typical, age old “I will make you love me eventually” romance story. You did add parts of your own twist to this genre, so yay for that.

                6/10: Believability
                Hm, it was kind of odd someone to be dating every week. Personally, I have never heard or seen anyone do that, but if someone does do that, um, congrats to them? I just had a hard time believing it that’s all. Also, in the first chapter, why did Youngwoon suddenly ask Sungmin if he can make him fall for him? That was just way too quickly. You should’ve built it up a bit before he could even ask that. Actually, matter of fact, I don’t think Youngwoon should’ve asked Sungmin that at all. That kind of defeats Sungmin’s purpose. So, yes, you should’ve built up the tension a bit for that to be even a thought. Along with that, when you had Youngwoon seem almost dejected when Sungmin asked him out. And then Youngwoon’s reason for that was because he didn’t want to damage the friendship. I’m just saying, if he is even thinking that it would damage the friendship, then the friendship wasn’t even that strong to begin with. Now I know it’s because Youngwoon had that car accident and made him forget Sungmin and all that jazz, I don’t think his friendship with Sungmin should be a thought that its not going to work out. Moving on, I think Youngwoon’s dating conditions seem a bit redundant if he ends up breaking them anyway. Not that great of conditions, just saying. Also, Heechul seemed way too mean, like he outed Kyuhyun in the first few chapters that he had a crush on Youngwoon. That doesn’t really seem like a thing a friend would do. With that, I don’t know how your friends talk, or the people around you talk, but honestly, you the hell says, casually at that, that they ship people in real life. My friends do that jokingly but the characters never s

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Amalya
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Chapter 22: After finally finishing writing It Begins With Blood (still posting the last couple chapters), I decided to revisit the previous review. It still has just as much impact now as it did then, if not more so. There are certainly many things I could go back and change to make it more accessible to readers and more pertinent to the tags specifically listed. As I got to the end, it definitely felt even harder to juggle the people I'd introduced and to make sure they all had some sort of resolution. To the point that I'm not sure I succeeded even half as well as I intended. But I do know that with the sound critique given, the access to the polls taken, and the suggestions made in regards to how I can make it better, this is certainly a project I would like to put under the microscope again at a later point in time. Perhaps when it's not so fresh (now) and it's had a chance to settle. Writing 'The End' is always hard with any extensive piece of work and this one was no different. But I do feel I can make it better and give it a stronger direction and purpose in the future. To that end, I wanted to thank Amber_Sica again and especially you Librarian for keeping the reviews in an easily accessible archive for later perusal. It's incredibly helpful and I will be coming back to it in the future. Cheers!