53/80 KangminBread - Substitute Shell
The Library ArchivesSubstitute Shell
written by KangminBread
reviewed by WinterMelodies
Title: 10/10
I think that the title suited the story and it was very original.
Plot: 21/35
4/5: Originality, 4/10: Believability
The coma concept has been done too many times but the idea of Sungmin being connected to the robot shell is really interesting and a great idea! However, coma stories in general are very unbelievable. It’s been done too many times that after a while it just gets old, and in reality, comas and memory loss do not work like that. I would recommend trying to find a different idea that would still fit with the whole Sungmin being in the robot. I also had trouble believing how Sungmin realizes that he loves his adopted brother and all that. To be honest it’s happened so many times that it’s not very original anymore, and though it is an overused plot piece, it is not very believable.
10/10: Narration
I actually really like the way you narrated the story. You had a consistent, smooth and natural voice and it was really nice.
3/10: Settin
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