after prison

JaeKnight

Title: [4/5]

- The title rise the curiosity. Me as the reader was wondering what you mean by ‘After Prison’. For a writer title act as magnet to pull reader to stop by and read our story.

Foreword/ Description: [15/15]

- The description is well done. Nice and simple. You make the forward as the hint of your story so the reader would wondering what exactly you want to express. 
 

Plotline: [19/20]

- It was organize and its make me feel what the character feel. 
 

Flow of the Story: [20/20] 

- It’s not like roller coaster that would eventually making reader didn’t continue their reading. The most memorable part for me is when he was actually thinking. Like during parole hearing and the most of the most memorable is when he was monologue inside when he stabbed Luhan that this is not his home. I could relate to that when we were doing something for life and we left it, it would be hard to let go or get used to it. You explain well in the story so reader won’t left hanging.
 

Character Development: [15/15]

- The most memorable part for me is when he was actually thinking. Like during parole hearing and the most of the most memorable is when he was monologue inside when he stabbed Luhan that this is not his home. I could relate to that when we were doing something for life and we left it, it would be hard to let go or get used to it. You explain well in the story so reader won’t left hanging.
 

Grammar & Spelling: [15/15]

- I didn’t want to comment much on this. It’s perfect.
 

Overall Enjoyment: [9/10]

- It's enjoyable for someone looking for something new to read.

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