Chapter 74: Woah okay! I'm gonna start by saying how adorable this story was. I loved that everything fell into place nicely in the ending! I just loved that the character development of Daehyun, how it very much contrasted from what he was before and how sweet he's gotten ever since he started dating the main character! Oh and one main thing, I just LOVE that you didn't give a specific name to the girl so every single fangirl is able to be her! (Applause for the author ;))
Although, I thought the chapters were a bit undetailed, it lacked some background story. There should've been more inside opinions from each characters. Don't get me wrong I appreciate that you're making it from a third person's point of view, but I think the main character herself didn't really have a distinct personality that reminds readers of her even if they're not reading the fanfic at the moment, do you get what I mean?
I thought there should've been more emotion and descriptions espcially when the story got into it's wonderful :) (when she left for america). It would've been better if you wrote more about what they each got through without each other. So overall it lacked some back story and details especially the rest of the bap members (i couldnt help but feel theyre a bit useless without some personalities being described)
I hope that my comment can help you become an even better author! I love this story! I can tell why so many people enjoyed reading it!! It was funny, utterly ADORABLE and it's not too long, not too short! Hopefully this can be a constructive advice for you!! :D keep it up!!
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