Calling... shukurimu_daisuki
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Title[5/5]: Your title was creative and fit your story.
Poster(s)[2/5]: Your poster really doesn't fit your story. Well it can... seing as the one shot is angst and the eye looks like it's crying.
Description & Foreword [6/10]:
There was a few gramatical error in your description such:
' He was 11 years old.
Him was 7 years old.
Instead of using him, you can use the actual name of the character.
They met and their friendship begins only to be separated after.
Begins should become began.
They made [a] promise to meet again 10 years later.
A should be added in between made and promise.
And here he is, waiting for the boy in the promise place on their promise date.
This sentence should become either And there he was / here he was, waiting for the boy at the promise place from their promise date.
Will the boy come?
Or will it be Only Tears? '
But since English isn't your first language I'll let part of it slide. Your foreword was plain and simple. Most people doesn't like Comic Sans MS, so I advice you to switch it to a more dramatical font such as Georgia, Lucida Sans Unicode, or Times New Roman.
Plot and Characters[29/30]: You're plot was different and exotic. I loved your plot and characters personalities very much. The ending was such a surprise. Your plot was an adorable mixture of fluff and angst.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Word Chose[19/25]: Since English isn't your first language, I'll let you off the hook. There were minor errors here and there. You've tried your best, and your best is pretty good! I'd love to go over the whole one shot in this review but It'll be to long, so if you want I'll send you a reviewed version through private messages.
Flow[10/10]: You're fine was fine.
Overall Enjoyment[14/15]: I loved it! It was truly enjoyable.
Total: 85% a.k.a B Reviewed By: cottonSHINeecandy
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