Title[5/5]: Your title made sense. Captilization is good. It suits your story. It's somewhat eyecatching...

Design[5/5]: I love your poster. It's very beauitful. The color blends are also very nice. I really liked your background too. It was almost exactly like your poster except without the pictures.

Description & Foreword [9/10]: Your description is very nice. It gives the reader a small yet descriptive introduction to the story without revealing too much information. Your foreword is pretty good. The credits were a little annoying. I think you should either make they a gray-ish color or make them smaller.

Plot and Characters[26/30]: When I started reading, I noticed there was a link to a song. Although I didn't listen to the song or like the fact that there was even a link, I guess it suited your story. Your characters had their cliches at times, but it's okay.

Grammar & Punctuation [14/15]: There were some minor speling mistakes, nothing all too serious though. Your vocabulary is alright too. 

Creativity [13/15]: I haven't seen any stories including your plot so I guess it's pretty original. The ending is 

Flow[5/5]: Your story flowed amazingly. I was able to understand what you had written without having to think about it.

Overall Enjoyment[13/15]: I don't really like reading stories about girls X boys.... I'm a BABY though~.

Grade: 90%