Note: I have changed the format for this review. And I am so so so sorry it has taken so long! 

Title [4/5]: I like the title. Rainbows and Hurricanes sounds interesting and it's very visual.

Design [4/10]: The way you keep changing all of the colors in the story makes it incomprehensible. I had trouble figuring out what the point of view was. I suggest that you perhaps dedicate full chapters to just one point of view instead of switching around.

Description and Forward [8/10]: The description is lovely. I especially love the line "When there's rainbows and hurricanes at ever corner, you only have two choices; stand up or back down." That is an amazing line and it makes me want to read the story. Fantastic!

Here is where it gets rough. Your English is pretty good, but you need to brush up on things like studying tenses. So, here we go.

Plot and Character Development: As of right now, I can't understand the story very well. You switch characters and writing styles too much. For instance, at the very introduction everything is in italics making me think that maybe it's a flashback, but then I'm not so sure. You also go in between writing dialogue like this

Yoona: Noona, I'm sorry!

And then writing it normally. I cannot stress enough how important it is to practice continuity in your stories. If you absolutely must change the point of view, you need to point it out. Let me show you an example.

Yoona's POV:

I'm running late to school, and I'm afraid that the teacher will yell at me again!

Jiyong's POV:

Yoona runs past me screaming about being late.

But I don't reccomend that. Excessive changes in POV are...annoying. Instead, try:

Yoona is running late to school, terrified that the teachers will yell at her again like last time. Unbeknownst to her, Jiyong watched her every move from his perch in the coffee shop. 

And remember! Please watch out for your tenses! If you begin the story in past tense, you have to keep it that way!

I am not giving you a grade for this section because I had too much trouble understanding. You could quite possibly have a stunning plot and excellent characters, but I can't tell because I can't understand what is going on or who is who. My apologies.

Grammar [5/15]: Grammar definitely needs work. I can't select anything in your story so I'll just give you key points to work on:

• Tenses. You go back and forth between past and present. 
• Continuity. Stick to one style. Write dialogue in one way, and stick to one point of view.

The way you describe things is nice though, usually. 

Creativity [9/15]: As with before, I can't exactly tell what the story is about. But I know it's about school life, and the somewhat stereotypical characters that always seem to appear in high school fics. I personally don't have a problem with over used plots as long as they author sets themself apart from others in some way. Like, for instance, the story has unique tensions or conflicts, a unique style, or unique characters. When you're re-evaluating the story, try and identify what the oomph of your story is. What sets it apart from the others? I'm glad that you like writing, but read over your story and ask yourself if it's something that you would read. 

Flow [2/5]: This is because of the problems with understanding.

Overall Enjoyment [7/15]: I'm working off of the assumption that I would have probably enjoyed the story if I wasn't so confused because I love your description. I think that there is a ton of potential for you because you seem to have great ideas, just not always a way to express those ideas. I think you need to practice to develop your own writing style, and you need to remember to type out regular dialogues and keep the story continuous. You seem to be a creative person, which will take you pretty far in the world of writing fanfics. 

I wish you the absolute best of luck in all of your future works and I would also like to thank you from the bottom of my heart for being so patient with me and my slow moving reviews. I can't aplogize enough for taking all that time up. Keep writing and keep learning! I hope to see you featured one day, but it'll take dedication! 

Final Grade:  39/75 or  52%