Review for Extravangant Challenge Season 2 by SuJuandSHINeefan23

Title[3/5]: Hmm..You don't really have the chapters up..But, it kind of did catch my attention~

Poster(s)[0/5]: There's no poster...You need to get a poster done by a good graphic shop. I recomend Supa Luv Graphics. That's where I usually get my posters done..

Description & Foreword [4/10]: Your description was very good-ish...Uhm.. You didn't really have to put: "In This Fanfic" because thats just not good at all and doesn't look right on a despription like.. its unappetizing. Think of it as a dish on a menu, it doesn't say "In this dish" or something like that. It gave me the cast on who was who so, that was very good. The foreword..was this:

"Today is the first day back of doing LME..I hate that I still have to do this why could I just be in a new drama! ugh! I'm so mad! I still have to wait 1 more month until the president comes back from Brazil! I really hate wearing this uniform! why me?! WHY!! I sure hope he comes back faster! My mission for today is help out on set for Lian's drama..well i least i got one good thing out of this..which is seeing Lian again."

I didn't like it at all..They had lots of mistakes. I will point out how it's suppose to look like~:

"Today is the first day back of doing LME...I really hate that I still have to do this! Why couldn't I just be in a new drama instead of this one?! This makes me so mad! I even have to wait one more month until the president comes back from Brazil...I really hate wearing this uniform! Why does it have to be me?! I really hope he comes back faster...What I have to do today is just help out on Lian's drama set. Atleast I got one good thing out of this...seeing Lian..."

I will first point out WHAT WAS WRONG. What was wrong was: 

- Instead of putting LME put the what the whole thing actually means! What if the reader doesn't know what the thing stands for? Like me, I have no idea what it stands for, thats why I didnt put the whole thing on the 'how its supposed to look like' pharagraph.

- Do NOT put two periods, put three if you want the person to stop saying something for a second or two.

- You should really check on your grammer. That's it, the spelling is fine but, the grammer is not good right now...Plus, I checked your profile and it says your from California, you should be really better in your grammer if you live there.

- Don't put the actual number 1...it looks just very unappetizing to some readers.

Plot and Characters[15/30]:  I didnt get what was happening at all because there were no chapters. I'm just saying, if you want something reviewed it should have atleast ONE chapter. Your characters were good though.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Word Chose[15/25]: It wasnt good. The grammer was bad, and I told you up there ^ That you shouldve had better grammer... Your spelling was good. The punctuation was bad. It didn't go in the right places and you ended sentences too quickly. The word chose was good also...

Flow[0/10]:  No chapters, there is no point of grading this part.

Overall Enjoyment[o/15]: There were no chapters and I was no anticipating of reading that one. Please make it more better to read.

Things you'll need:

- Poster and background

- New foreword.

Grade:  37% a.k.a:  ..I dont even think that has a letter.

Reviewed By Taeminnes_wifey
((Hey, you picked me and I didn't like what I read. You should've added a chapter or two. Sorry for being too harsh...And you do know if you just make friends with the reviewer it won't make me nicer ><;; ))