Title[2/5]: I didn't particularly like your title because slavery is never supposed to be in romance stories and it is fairly overused in AFF fanfics... Plus your title was very common. If you want to draw people into your story, you have to be very detailed but you can't give away the story's plot within the story.

Design[4/5]: Your poster was cute, but it doesn't suit your story at all. The story appears to be somewhat seriously while your poster looks as if nothing wrong will go wrong. Your poster should have had grays, blues, reds, purples, blacks, and white... Or something along those lines to give it a more emotional and deep meaning.

Description & Foreword [10/10]: Your description and foreword are pretty nice. Honestly, they are very captivating to me unless I'm really bored and searching for a fic.

Plot and Characters[29/30]: Telling from your foreword, your character's seem very bland and boring. However, I'm glad that Kai's personality isn't: bad boy, flirt, ert, playboy, etc. That would have made me punch a hole through my laptop screen. As I have said before, your plot is extremely popular and not supposed to be romantic. Slavery was and still is taboo. Slavery had to be one of the worst experience that human beings in general have gone through. I don't expect to enjoy your story if it's like the others..... FORGET IT! While reading your story.... I was reminded of an anime called Ai No Kusabi. I really loved it and I cannot help but compare your story to it. I was satisfied with what I read.

Grammar & Punctuation [15/15]: I didn't notice any major grammatical or spelling errors.

Creativity [9/15]: Slaves stories are no joke and are extremely popular. I haven't seen a slave story though. 

Flow[5/5]: Your slow flow was great. Every chapter flowed into the next and the scences weren't chopping. The minor character introductions didn't interupt your flow too.

Overall Enjoyment[15/15]:  Although I realy didn't enjoy your title and the plot idea, I was surprised by the twist and surprised how similar it was to one of my faborite animes. 

Grade: 89%