Title [5/5]: Your title is pretty cliché, but I kinda like it, and it fits your story. 

Poster(s) [5/5]: Your poster was pretty. I liked it a lot, and the quote you put was perfect. 

Description & Foreword [7/10]: Your description is short and hard to understand, and your foreword only shows us the characters and a quote. But as a reader I already kind of know what kind of story this will be from the title and the quote. However, your description says “Only that one more day made them realize everything out.” Remove the word ‘out’ from the sentence, you don’t need it.

Plot and Characters [19/30]: Your female lead isn’t very defined in this one-shot, except that she really loves and cares for Myungsoo. I don’t really learn much about Myungsoo either, until the end. The plot is quite cliché, but since I don’t read much of this anyways, I found it interesting. However, I found a couple things that bothered me a bit. Myungsoo keeping his illness a secret annoyed me. Why couldn’t he have told Myungja WHY he wanted to spend one last day with her? Also, the part where Myungsoo tells Myungja he only gets to have “one more day” bothered me because Myungja acts surprisingly calm about it. Sure she tears up, and she inwardly breaks down, but wouldn’t she be curious as to why Myungsoo said this, and ask him about it? Actually when I think about it, your characters are kind of unrealistic and hard to believe. 

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Word Choice [18/25]: Although you had some help editing, I still noticed many mistakes in grammar/word tense/sentence structure. Everything else is fine. 

Flow [8/10]: I think the flow was pretty good, except, in the middle, it seemed quite choppy, since they meet up so many different times, and you have a few time-skips. 

Overall Enjoyment [10/15]: I liked the beginning paragraphs, and I liked the part towards the end, where Myungsoo dies (Not that I don’t like Myungsoo, it just left a strong impression on me. I could almost feel my heart breaking for Myungja). However, the parts in the middle did not please me as much. I just couldn’t get past the fact that Myungja had to find out about Myungsoo’s illness through a letter, and your characters’ unrealistic actions/reactions. Don’t be discouraged by my criticism, though! You have the potential to be a really good writer. Some parts in your fic made me really feel emotions for the characters, and I was totally able to imagine all the scenes in my head. Keep working hard, and you will improve greatly!

Score: 72/100 Reviewed By: tillynilly