Author : RyfenderiA

Story title : Make Me Your Sl*t

Story type : Oneshot

Reviewer : sonnet_sartori

Review completion : 06 07 2016

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Overall rating : 77

Title [7/10]

I like your title as an EXO-L and a baekyeol shipper. It sounds and will attract any shipper of baekyeol for sure. But if I was not a fan, or just a mediocre fan, the title would have been pushy and way too revealing. I guess it goes both ways.

Foreword/description [9/10]

Well done on the description! It's difficult to shorten and sweeten the story into a short one or two liner, but you did it and you did it well. The foreword was aesthetic and eye catching. You could have arranged the credits better and made the authors note a little shorter.

Plot [8/10]

the plot is actually pretty good! it was light and enjoyable even thought it was heavy . The old friends reuniting was a good if not cliched theme. The 'reuniting' bit was a bit too fast for me, though. I like a little , and the way that they decided they were going to each others' brains out was too fast for me. the was amazing. tone down on the , though. it's hot, but too much of it seems forced. is difficult to write, and you've done an AWESOME job.

characterization [9/10]

because it was a oneshot, characterization was short. As I said above, the plot seemed to go too fast. You were too eager to get to the ty parts, and skipped a lot of the character development. but you get high points here because it is after all, a oneshot, and for , character development doesnt matter :P

grammar [8/10]

no major grammar mistakes as far as I noticed. you could do with a re-read, though.

Vocabulary [9/10]

vocab is also not bad. your dictionary is impressive! i really liked the . 

really.

setting/description [10/10]

for good , description is very important, and you rocked it.

amazing.

no more to say.

/conclusion [9/10]

i would have liked it if the plot developed a bit more, which would have resulted in a better ending, but I can't complain because the crux of your story is the , and you did that very well.

enjoyment [8/10]

fricking loved the . 

hoped for more character development.

baekhyun is hot.

total - 77/100

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