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Author: MicTest

Story title: On The SWINGS of Love

Story type: Chaptered

Reviewer: vronvron

Review completion: 2/4/2016

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Overall Story rating: 8/10 

Title: [9/10]

The title definitely suits the genre of your story as it has a bit of cheesiness and also has the metaphorical aspect to it as well. Not much to say here other than that. Hoever, it is a bit cliche.

Foreword/Description: [10/10]

Your description is short and sweet. It tells us the main plot of the story, yet it keeps many things hidden, which makes the reader want to continue following on to find out what will happen to the couple.

Plot/ character development:[8/10]

I feel as though the story was a bit rushed towards the start, although I don't know how long you're planning to make this story. The introduction of Yonghwa was a bit fast and I feel that you could have moved the flashback to an earlier part of the chapter since it caused a bit of confusion as to what had happened for Seohyun and Yonghwa to meet. Since its only the beginnings of the story, the development of the characters seems to be doing better.

Characterization: [7/10]

The characters are somewhat cliche in the sense that you have the different types of friends in the group. The shy girl and the bad boy is also a bit cliche.

Grammar/Syntax:[6/10]

Most of your sentences seem rather short and there isn't a great variety of length between them. This can sometimes bore readers since the mind needs to be stimulated a bit more, with a range of short and long sentences. Your grammar is good, however, there were a few small changes of word choice that I could see that needed to be made. They were only minor though and wouldn't cause too much of an issue.

Your descriptions could be a little less direct I feel. More showing rather than telling. For example:

This could be better read as:

Vocabulary: [8/10]

Your choice of vocabulary is very simple but also much more colloquial. It gives a more familiar vibe, however, I think that perhaps if you used some more sohpisticated vocab, it could turn out better. However, even though I do say that, the simple language does suit the lighthearted story.

Setting/Description: [8/10]

The setting was a little confusing for me at first. When reading the first chapter, it almost seemed like Seohyun was getting ready for high school rather than university. I feel like you could probably put in a bit more effort to add more to the descriptions about the settings/places where the characters are at since it can get a bit confusing at times.

/Conclusion:[10/10]

As the story isn't complete yet, I'll just go off what I read and it seems like the story will end pretty well since it is a romcom.

Enjoyment:[9/10]

Overall, I enjoyed it quite a bit, however I did notice that it felt like I had either read a story ot seen a drama with a similar concept of a shy girl being forced to be with a bad boy even though she has a crush.

Total: 75/90

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