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Author: syxb7z9

Story title: Power Off

Story type: Chaptered

Reviewer:EmyAnne

Review completion:4/1/2016

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Overall Story rating: 10/10 

Title: [7/10]

First and foremost, your title seems to be quite out of place. To be honest, I can’t seem to think of anything when I see your title. However,  it does help in getting me hooked because I wanted to know what the whole story is about, since it’s unique in its own way.

By the way, your title description on your poster does help in explaining the title of your story. I got the message of you trying to tell  readers that the character, ie L and IU are two different characters online and in  reality. Therefore, I guess you choose quite an appropriate title for your story.

Foreword/Description: [8/10]

Your description is pretty much alright. You summarize your whole story adequately, much to my satisfaction. It gives me an impression of the whole story; except,  It doesn’t really cause one to wonder much, except for ‘will they be able to get together?’

But I guess your teaser  intrigued me enough, it actually made me want to read your story. It was like, how would IU react when she knows that he’s L? And how would L reacts when he knows that she’s IU? And there’s quite a lot more questions and wonders that get me hooked with your story. Good job!

Plot/ character development:[9/10]

I‘ve read a few stories such as this, being close online without realising they were each other’s soulmate. Yeah, it was pretty cliche. However, I do think that the plot of this story is one of your biggest strengths. You have written the plot of the story beautifully, and as such you’ve managed to own the story. Even if you guess that the meeting of the two people are pretty fast, but I think it really suited to the story.

You started off with two people who don’t know each other and but slowly begin to get  close to each other. I guess that’s the power of online magic . It can  make  strangers feel  like  close friends in no time. And I wonder what will happen when Ji Eun meets Myungsoo!

For the chapter length, I guess it is satisfying for me. It’s not too long, neither is  it too short. You’ve filled in quite a lot of things  that are needed to enlighten each chapter, therefore I wouldn’t want to comment that much on it.

Characterization: [9/10]

For the caharacterization, I couldn’t really picture Myungsoo and Jieun pretty well. Maybe it was just me, but they seem to change a little bit too fast. For example, Myungsoo was phrased as a ‘cold city boy’, charming, handsome, yet a bit quirky at times, but he’s someone who’s very friendly and open online. Myungsoo just seemed to have this unpredictable character which I couldn’t point off whether he’s cold, friendly, open or clumsy. Yes, he could be all, but it’s just a little bit cliche, if I could say. I can’t pointed out which is his definite character offline or online.

For Ji Eun, i don’t really get her either. She seems a bit rough with her parents, but I do understand that she changes after what happens to her parents. But sometimes, it’s just not like her. Just like Myungsoo, I can’t seem to point out her definite character offline and online.

The other think that bothers me too, are you actually allowed to drive your car when you’re sixteen or seventeen? I mean, yeah that’s fine, but shouldn’t it be illegal? Correct me if I’m wrong, though. ^^

Grammar/ Syntax:[10/10]

Your grammar is absolutely satisfying. Your story is very descriptive and narrative. Most of the verbs used are in the present tense, and you used the verbs in the past tense correctly whenever it needed to be. I’m not a grammar nazi and there’s really much grammatical error that I could find, therefore, I give you full marks! Congratulations!

Vocabulary: [10/10]

Your vocabulary is outstanding and I see no reason for you to not get a perfect full score for this part.

Setting/Description: [8/10]

I do love your writing style, you describe the emotions and the feelings beautifully. I enjoyed it very much.

For the settings part, to be honest, I couldn’t really picture much of it. I could see you describe the various  settings, ie the house, the school, the road, pretty well, but I can’t point out  the exact location of the character, ie Ji Eun and Myungsoo. Seoul? US? UK? Or is it supposed to be a mystery?

/Conclusion:[10/10]

Since it is an ongoing story, I couldn’t really comment on the conclusion and the part yet. However, if I were to comment on the conclusion for each chapter’s ending, I'd say that  they were very intriguing and always  left me feeling rather giddy. I always  wanted to know what will happen in the next chapter. 

Enjoyment:[10/10]

Overall, I would like to say that I really enjoyed your story. Most of the characters used are my favorite celebrities, and I’m mostly familiar with them. I do think that you have written the story  beautifully. I do want to know how the story is going to be end and I hope you wouldn’t make it too long, though. Haha. ^^ 

total: 81/90 

Hello, Anne here. I’m really sorry if my review is not up to what you’ve expected. I’m mostly direct and quite honest with my thoughts and usually stray away from the norm. Therefore, I deeply apologize if I offended you anyway in my review. But anyways, you managed to get me hooked on your story! You’ve gain another subscribers! Congratulations! ^^

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