Title 4/5
The title did give the ideas of crane but it didn’t have 99 crane. He-he. It’s still a on-going, so we’ll have to wait and see.

Poster and background 5/5
I admired your background and poster, the blending of the poster was vibrant and very detail with the crane and the three main guy character.

Forewords 10/10
The forward was very detailed and told you about each character which brought out the charisma of each character, which was very remarkable since you really got to know one of each of them in the story.

Plot 9/10
I’ll have to say it’s long, but your still going so it still adds up. He-he. But as you can see the story is very soft and ..(Uh, I can’t seems to get the right words. :[) Everything together goes well and it, rounds it. :]

Flow 9/10
The flow was very melodious and entertaining, it got the readers what the story was about and who was going for who.

Spelling/grammar/vocabulary 13/15
There were minor mistake, I have no problem at all, but it’ll be much, much better if you corrected spelling error in your writing. He-he. :] Grammar were little too, but no worries, your safe.

Creativity/originality 10/10
Very created, I haven’t read a story like this so your very lucky, but the title gave me a hints of other stories that had ‘cranes’ title names, but it still added up the wonderful story.

writing style 4/5
Your writing style was really nice, but the sentence were pounded up together, which was kinda hard to read if everything is squished up together, but it’s your story. :]

Idioms/use of words/quotes 10/10
I’ll have to say the quote used in the stories were wonder. I enjoyed it very much.

overall enjoyments 10/10
I enjoyed it to the fullest. He-he. So consider me a as new reader. :] Every bit of it got me in, I loved how Kit was the other crane girl with Hanna. That was very interesting and fun to know, but all along, you didn’t revel her secret until Danson found out. It was incredible. :]

Total 84/90

hi lynn! thanks for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this fan fic :)