I HAVE A BROTHER!?!

Description

You had a very normal life. Like a ordinary girl life. You have no siblings. You dont want siblings. Because they are very annyoing. You live with your grandparents because your parents died in a car addident. You couldnt eat or sleep when your parents died. You werent yourself when your grandparents told you that they pass away. 

 

But.... They told you something that you dont want to hear............................. 

 

 

YOU HAVE TO READ IT! :) 

Oh and sorry if theire are wrong grammer or spelling mistakes because English is not my first language! 

Foreword

You: Lee MinYoung 
 

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-wear glasses, but wear contacts 

-pretty, beautiful 

-smart

-nice, patient 

-good cooker 

-talented: singing and dancing (pro at dance/sing ) 

 

Onew: Lee Jinki 

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- leader of shinee

-member of shinee  

- cute, nice (kind of........) 

-little sister that is you

 

Choi Minho: 

Choi Minho

 

-Member of Shinee

- has a crush on you 

-nice, patience

-smart 

-good at cooking

-talented: singing and dancing 

 

 Nam Woohyun:

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-handsome

-nice

-good cooker

- girlfriend is _____ ( not telling you , you have to find out later! )

- patient

- member of infinite 

- kingka 

Kevin Woo: 

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- CUTE, Smart, 

-Good at cooking

-Caring to alot of people

-In u-kiss 

 

Shinee 

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(Left to Right) 

-Onew/ Lee Jinki 

-Tamien 

-Jonghyun 

-Minho 

-Key 

 

Infinate:

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 -Myungsoo (L) 

-Woohyun

-Sungyeol

-Sungjong

-Dongwoo

-Hoya 

-Sunggyu

-Kingkas 

 

 

F(x)

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-Krystal

-Victoria

-Amber

-Sulli

-Luna

-And you. 

U-KISS: 

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-Dongho

-Kevin

- Hoon

-AJ

-Kiseop

-Soohyun

-Eli

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stephanie1138 #1
Chapter 1: Chapter 1: To be frank, I don't really like your writing.
First of all, the characters are boring. They are pratically the same person. They act the same. All of them are nice, good looking and insanely attractive. In short, flawless. It makes your story seems dead. Secondly, you narrate too much. Specifically, you wrote about everything which is very unnecessary. For example, the narration about Minyong's doing in the school. You narrate on her going to school, about her opening the locker, about her being boring in class. You can include them in the story but try to make them less obvious. Don't be too direct. Thirdly, you're making me confused by not sticking to any point of view. At first, you'd addressed Minyoung as 'you' and then as 'I'. It's hard to keep track on who's point of view is it. Because some of the stories out there is written from various characters' point of view.Also, you're using the word 'then' too much in your writing. I see that you try to connect the story using it but you keep repeating it over and over again. Lastly, I don't see the connection of the storyline. It doesn't flow nicely. The plot keep jumping all over the place. Try to be specific in writing the scenario. But don't write too much by writing unnecessary things. You're supposed to make the reader understand what's going on in your story. It able them to visualize the story easily.

Btw, I'm sorry for being harsh with my comment. I'm not trying to bash you with my comment. I just want to point out your flaws in writing so that you can improve them.
You also have your own strengths in writing. What's good about you is your idea. You have a great idea on wrtin it's just that your delivery is still poor. But, it's okay. I know you could improve your writing because I can see your potential as a good writer. I hope you're not going to get hurt by my comment. I'm sorry if my words is too harsh. Thank you and have a nice day.

And congratulations for being featured!
Iminthezone #2
Congrats
agentllama08
#3
Chapter 35: Update please
ShineeLeeJinki
#4
SEQUEL!!
naznew #5
i will read it..
EXOtic123 #6
umm....new reader here. you wrote infinate when its infinite on the foreward and you also used an old u-kiss photo but used the new members name........ but i'll start reading soon^^
unfixed-soul
#7
Sequel because it doesn't make sense to just end it like that.
naznew #8
Gomawo update...
a sequel because you make the story suspended..
LeeMinJi #9
Gomawo for the update :D Sequel please!