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Review

By '' Sapiya''

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When I Lived with Mr Popular

Title (1-5) - Score 3

The title for me would have to be not really original, since the fact that some have Mr. Popular in them.

Description/Forward (1-10) - 8

Description - Is it appealing? Descriptive? 

*Droooooollllllllll* I basically love the description why didn't I read earlier xD Mianhae~ I didn't have time T-T

​Forward - Gives too much info?

Okay your forward I freakin' love! The way you gave the description of the characters Minho and Ji Eun! They were good since you didn't give a lot of info but still left me intrigued :D The others were kind of iffy with "baddie" used. I don't know who that is?? But still nice since I want to know, and that's what you want, for the reader to become curious :)

Grammar? (1-10) - Score 8

​Your grammer is fine but some words might be missing a letter like "her" instead "here" and also "hurry" instead of "hurried", but I won't deduct points off a lot since I do the same thing sometimes lolol But tenses are important! Don't like when I have to reread something though I get the jest.

Does it flow? (1-10) - Score 10

Does it make sense from scene to scene?

Every thing flows smoothly and nice from different scenes which I like so bravo 10!

Characters (1-10) - Score 10

Am I able to get to know he/she in the story? Is he/she introduced well?

All the characters were portrayed perfectly and brought out nicely ^^ From Ji Eun, to Minho, to the jelly fangirls Min A and Chae Ri, you did perfecto~!

Creativity (1-10) - Score 8

Second chapter I SHIPPED MINHO AND HER SO HARD IT WASNT EVEN FUNNYYYYYYYYYY xDD You write so GOOD it was hypnotizing! Chapt after chapt :D From what I've read, it's creative to me, however, there are other plots in where the main guy is living with the unknown-girlfriend-to-be so gotta remove 2 points :< Btw, omg YoungChul! *SPAZZES* He so perfect!

Was it enjoyable to read? (1-10) - Score 10

Would I want to subscribe? Would I continue waiting for the next chapter? That first chapter was all [omgomgomgomgomg SPAZZ] lmaooo It was like I was watching a Kdrama but written x))) And that chapter (Pain) damn, the shoe/glass thing...I felt her pain....aigoo! How could they do such a thing! This story is hilarious, overdosed with cuteness and squeels, and awesome so KEEP UPDATING :DDDDD

 

★Total - 88 /100

 

Don't forget to credit the shop and I wish you the best of luck! 

-Sapiya

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Story Title: (2/5)

It revealed what the story was going to be about.

Description/Summary/Foreword: (3/5)

The same as the title. It revealed what the story would be about, but it was good.

Story Plot/Originality: (8/10)

I've read other fanfics that have the girl and the K-pop idol living together, but your story was still pretty original.

Flow: (10/10)

The story has a nice flow to it.

Grammar/Spelling: (8/10)

(Ch.15)

'JiEun hanged her shirt over the door before turning to the tap.' The correct past tense word for hang is 'hung' not 'hanged'.

'....,Jieun off the ta