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Hey everyone ✋🏻

 

How are you ? I hope you are doing fine ^^ 

Well as you all noticed. TARA !!!! The new poster ^^

what do you think about it? I designed it ;) ? 

So long time since the last update ^^ sorry for getting your hopes up:") when you saw updated! 

So After finishing the editing I will update again hopefully.

When that will be ? I don't really know XD 

Please new readers and subscribers leave some words, tell me your opinion, And I hope if I can gain more UPVOTES. 

Thanks in advance <3 

See you next update ^^ 

 

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AnVocNighMa
Chapter 5, Impossible isn't here. I accidentally deleted it so I am just editing all the other chapters. Chapter 6, The Beginning is posted.

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jcnafaiz
#1
(*˘︶˘*).。.:*♡
verine #2
Chapter 35: Hi, thanks for sharing this fic. I always enjoy fic about tvxq reunion so thanks again.

I won't comment about the plot and the portrayal of the characters. I keep open mind about how the author want it to be. There are various typos but it's still okay.

My main concern about this fic is the punctuation, which is a mess. I'm sorry if it sounded so harsh.

(example from the last chapter) :
Changmin hesitated. Can he ask this or not?. But he collected his courage and asked : " when will we meet them again? ". He looked at yunho's calm expression and waited for him to answer !
" leave it " yunho said.
Changmin was dumbfounded!!! Leave it ! !!!! For who !! He was confused by that very simple reply. So he asked again:
" for . . . . ?! "

Perhaps most of this fic loyal readers don't care about it or they just do fast read and get the main point. But for me and perhaps other readers out there who read in detail, it's so messy and distracting. Punctuation is a very basic stuff and there is a default rule about it. Unlike grammar, there is no excuse for such author to not put it properly.

I'm not a pulitzer winner author but I can give some suggestion about how it could be written (mostly related to the punctuation) :
Changmin hesitated. Can he ask this or not?
He collected his courage and asked, "when will we meet them again?"
He looked at Yunho's calm expression and waited for him to answer.
" Leave it", Yunho said.
Changmin was dumbfounded. Leave it? For who?
He was confused by that very simple reply. So he asked again, "for...?"

It's not perfect but better. Don't overuse !!!!!! or ????? Also put the correct punctuation mark. If they just talked normally, don't put !!!! as if they're screaming at each other. I hope in your next story you will put more attention. Doing that plus improve the way you write the dialogues, I'm sure people will come to read and votes without you asking for it :)
Fireglobe
#3
Chapter 1: Hi. New subscriber here. :) After reading the description, I really want to read this fanfic but this fanfic in a progress of editing? I've subscribed, so can you notify in the story feed if the whole editing has complete? Thank you ^^

Sorry for asking a sudden favor. :)
natalie_ed
#4
Chapter 1: aishaa ... i miss u dongsaeng ^^
hy2min #5
Your story is just beautiful, I love your story !!
dee_9576 #6
Chapter 17: Hi, I am a new subscriber. I really love your story! I just found out about your story, was supposed to study for my exam but ended up reading 15 chapters in a go! :P
But it was worth the time, and I feel so much relaxed after reading it! I really love it! Hwaiting! ;)
bluelegacy
#7
Chapter 33: This is so heartwarming... I hope they get back together or at least they are in contact..
I am in tears right now... I have never loved a group like this <3
melinoes #8
Chapter 35: hi Author-nim! i'm back after a long absence :3 you will update soon, right? i really wait for your update, so please come back as soon as possible, kay?? Btw, i like your poster!! <3 hehehe
CoLatte
#9
Chapter 1: Hi. I'm a new subscriber. How do I know if you're done editing that chapter? You know, I don't want to miss a chapter.
T-araFans #10
Chapter 35: Nice poster ^^