Story Title: 5/5

-Just like before the title really reflects the story and It make readers want to know more about the story, so two thumbs up :D

Graphics: 9/10

-so for the garphic it was cute and it also fits the story well but why not put the Title to it but anyways it was good.

Description/Foreword: 10/10

-It was nice and you wrote some details to the descrption/foreword and that gives us readers an idea about the story :D

Plot: 28/30

-okay so the Plot, It was nice and yeah. It was so dramatic when Minzy died and Bom didn’t have that much time to talk to her.

Characterisation: 15/15

-For the Characters, you showed the character of Bom and Minzy well in the story, we could acctualy depict their character from what you wrote in the story foreword.

Writing Style & Grammar: 15/20

Okay so again your grammar was good I actually could understand it but you just have to fix some minor errors like when you write year you wrote yeaer and then for example you wrote THank you but it should be thank you and again you wrote watied and it should be waited.

Personal Enjoyment: 10/10

Okay so I enjoyed the story but it was so dramatic it was so sad and It made me cry so much but anyways it was good and it gave me goosebumps while reading it :D

Total: 92/100
 

COMMENTS AND SUGGESTIONS: Great so you improved from last time but you just have to fix some minor errors but anyways I liked your fic keep it up FIGHTING !!!
REVIEWED ON: 23/2/15