Story Title:  5/5

Your title is something you don't always hear anywhere and so I like it!! It shows that it has a sweet story.

Graphics: 0/10

You have no graphics nor background. Those two are also incharge of making your story pretty and nice to look at. If you need help on looking for a graphics, I know many shops that provides graphics and posters for free or you could simply make your own creative poster.

Description/Foreword:9/10

Almost nice but was cutted of but I think that is for the best because if you continued, you might give your whole plot away so it is alright.

Plot: 28/30

It is a well paced story but when you write, you sometimes put full stops on the wrong places and so  is your comas. and when you explain things you put them on the wrong place making your sentence wrong. Your story isn't also that original since there are stories with the same plot as your's like when you met a friend and then you will leave them and in the end, your paths cross.

Writing Style  and Grammar: 15/20

You have a boring way of writing, you write short chapters, yes. But you don't put any fonts or nice dividers on it and you don't even have Posters or graphics to make your story nice to read and at the same time, nice to look at. And for your grammar, you have some grammatical errors. I know how hard it is to write a story using a language that is isn't the language of your country but for best guides in English, I suggest that you write your chapter in Microsoft word first because it would show you if you have a wrong spelling or grammar. When the line is Red it means wrong spelling and if green it means wrong grammar.

Characterization: 15/15

I am glad that you introduced your characters, It helped us know how you portrayed them in your story and nothing is wrong with them so I have nothing to complain about that. /smiles/

Total : 72/100     Keep on practicing your writing skills and you'll be able to get higher score next time !!

COMMENTS AND SUGGESTIONS: Sorry If I am so harsh on you, please forgive me /sobs/ but I just want to point out what you have to improve. Thanks for choosing our shop and we will be waiting for your next request!! 
REVIEWED ON:23/05/15