Kwon88im
ROS'E Review Shop [Closed]Story Title : 5/5
The title again is nice cause it is sweet and cute and it really matches the story. Sorry, I've got nothing to say XD
Graphics : 9/10
Great job !! now your poster is less boring and I really like it ^^ It is simple and nice at the same time ^^
Description/Foreword : 9/10
Much better than last time. and I find just a bit of correction but you really improved in writing the description. Good Job !! Author-nim.
Plot : 26/30
Your plot is again original but I just saw some wrong grammars again for example in your chapter 24.
Original : "Are you sure you're not pregnant a vacuum cleaner ?" Yuri asked teasingly.
Revised : "Are you sure your baby isn't a vacuum cleaner ?" Yuri asked, teasingly.
That sounds better right ? And BTW, the baby's name is cute.
Characterization : 15/15
Your characters are sooo cute ~ I like how Yuri and Yoona is casted in this story especially baby sarang ~ Whoa !! what a cute baby ~
Writing style and grammar : 15/20
Your writing style is nice but why not put some cute or colorful dividers ^^ I t would make it less boring and for your grammar, you have some mistakes that you could reread then you could correct it. I suggest you hire a beta reader to help you. I know someone who could help you just PM me if you would like to.
Personal enjoyment : 10/10
As always my mind is like GOSH she is so amazing to think of this kind of story !! Authornim, you really is a good writer please keep writing good stories ^^
Total : 89/100 Great JOB !!
COMMENTS AND SUGGESTIONS: Hello !! thanks again for choosing our shop !! I really enjoyed reading your story ^^ please do come and request from us again ~ and sorry for the delay
REVIEWED ON: 03/04/15
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