Kwon88im

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REVIEWER: ROSE_17


 
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Story Title : 5/5

The title again is nice cause it is sweet and cute and it really matches the story. Sorry, I've got nothing to say XD

Graphics : 9/10

Great job !! now your poster is less boring and I really like it ^^ It is simple and nice at the same time ^^

Description/Foreword : 9/10

Much better than last time. and I find just a bit of correction but you really improved in writing the description. Good Job !! Author-nim.

Plot : 26/30

Your plot is again original but I just saw some wrong grammars again for example in your chapter 24.

Original : "Are you sure you're not pregnant a vacuum cleaner ?" Yuri asked teasingly.

Revised : "Are you sure your baby isn't a vacuum cleaner ?" Yuri asked, teasingly.

That sounds better right ? And BTW, the baby's name is cute.

Characterization : 15/15

Your characters are sooo cute ~ I like how Yuri and Yoona is casted in this story especially baby sarang ~ Whoa !! what a cute baby ~

Writing style and grammar : 15/20

Your writing style is nice but why not put some cute or colorful dividers ^^ I t would make it less boring and for your grammar, you have some mistakes that you could reread then you could correct it. I suggest you hire a beta reader to help you. I know someone who could help you just PM me if you would like to.

Personal enjoyment : 10/10

As always my mind is like GOSH she is so amazing to think of this kind of story  !! Authornim, you really is a good writer please keep writing good stories ^^

 

Total : 89/100 Great JOB !!


COMMENTS AND SUGGESTIONS: Hello !! thanks again for choosing our shop !! I really enjoyed reading your story ^^ please do come and request from us again ~ and sorry for the delay
REVIEWED ON: 03/04/15

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kalon_sama #1
Frick I forgot to comment after I requested //realizes like a month later
Omg kill me I'm so sorry
Pingdwae
#2
Hello! i'm back again and i've made another request for review :)
blacksmile
#3
I've sent a request XD
sleepybeans
#4
Hi! I've requested! ^_^
kalon_sama #5
Chapter 39: Sorry for the late pick-up! I just recently got stable internet ;A;
But yes thank you for this review~ I didn't think you were that harsh, it's understandable since you like BTS as well. The title I thought would get a lower score, to be honest xD because I thought that that's how the song title was written; with a 'U' instead of 'You.' (I don't know anymore OTL. I'll change the graphics to match the background, and I see where you're coming from with how vague my foreword is, but meh. I personally like vague forewords so sorry~ And thank you for your comment in the plot section! I was actually lazing around nit-picking at some lines when I got the idea actually hehe. The main character wasn't supposed to be clear as I didn't want to use names and label anyone, but it could be any BTS member you'd want I guess~
Thank you for reviewing my story once again. I'll definitely come back!
AlisCookieMonster
#6
Chapter 43: BTW, I'll follow what you suggested and add line dividers! Thanks for the suggestion, never really thought of doing it until now~
AlisCookieMonster
#7
Chapter 43: Just saw the review! I totally wasn't expecting that, but thank you for reviewing my one shot, and I will credit you guys ASAP. :3
libianno
#8
Chapter 41: Thank you sooo very much for the review on Chasing Pavements. I truly appreciate your efforts in reviewing it for me. I will credit you as soon as I put up my last chapt.
Thank you :D
Pingdwae
#9
Ah i'm sorry but i'm cancelling my request :( mianhe.
blissfulcoconuts
#10
Chapter 42: I do use microsoft word before I update. I always wright on it and sure I would put pics and such in the upcoming chapters and i'll start putting borders