Story Title : 5/5

Your Story title is nice and It catched my eye from the first time I saw it and it's simple yet its meaningful. The title tells about the story and I give you two thumbs up for that !!

Graphics : 0/10

You don't have any Posters and posters are one of the things you have if you are writing a story. Posters attract readers. I suggest you to request from a graphic shop, there are plenty to choose from and if you want you could also make your own poster.

Description : 8/10

Well, your description is short but also meaningful. But I suggest you give some more details in it.

Original :  "HOW COULD HE ??. I LOVE HIM."

Revised : I've told him tons of times that I like him but he just ignores those words. But when another girl told him that she likes him, he accepted it without a blink of an eye.

How could He ? I Loved him !!

Plot : 27/30

Your plot was good. I liked how you wrote the story but you have some grammatical errors and sometimes I need to reread it to understand but anyways I could understand it and I enjoyed reading it. But one thing, how could she die ? she only placed the razor on her wrist not one her neck. Actually I was taken aback, please write a sequel for it.

Characterization : 14/15

Well your characters are optional but I like how you wrote the character. But I get confuse sometimes XD but that's okay :D. 

Writing Style and Grammar : 17/20

Your writing style is a bit messy. Try making the spaces a bit closer and make the font size 18 or 16 don't make it too big and the color is so bright. Well just like what I said before your grammar is good but you just have to fix some errors.

Original : And he'll never understands.

Revise : And he never understands.

Original : I hide behind the bush and see what happend.

Revise : I hid behind the bush and observed what would happen next.

I suggest you hire a beta reader.

Personal Enjoyment : 10/10

Mind blown !! The story is good and I really enjoyed it but just improve some more in your grammar.

Total : 81/100 Great Job !!

COMMENTS AND SUGGESTIONS: Hello !! Thanks for picking ROS'E REVIEW SHOP !! Your story is a great one !! I just suggest for a beta reader and please sorry if I'm a bit harsh on some parts but to be honest your story is something readers like me would enjoy reading for the rst of our lives. Oh and sorry for reviewing this too late XD
REVIEWED ON: 14/03/15