the last mistress by reddishdaisy_95



Criticism Level: 8

Title: 5/5

Description & Foreword: 10/10
If the entire thing wasn’t there, everyone would be freaking confused.

Characters: 19/20
The females in this story are weak. I’m serious. She gets beaten and so many times it’s not funny. That Miyoung girl is a . Junho did the right thing (in my opinion). Kris should seriously listen once in a while. What a disgusting ert that Lee Minwoo is and So Eun’s father is the worst father on earth next to that ert. However (or sad to say) there are people in this world that are like that. Lust for power, lust for younger girls.

Plot: 12/20
There are a lot of stories with this concept. There’s not much anything new to it except for all the scenes and . I don’t usually see that in the stories I read. Even the SIDE stories are linked into the plot.

Flow: 5/5
The good part is you separate the scenes and then you change the p.o.v’s accordingly which helps in understanding the situation and everyone won’t be confused.

Grammar & Vocabulary: 13/15
Helping me running my organization- Helping me run my organization
You’re growing EVEN more illusional now- I think it’s delusional
I was barely waked up-
Is it hurt?-Does it hurt
Catch for the dogs-Catch the dogs
What’s with the beg- Typo honey
He’s nearly to die now- I believe it’s dead
The choi will never lose…we’re innocence-I do not understand what you’re looking for That’s EVEN more brat-That’s even more bratty
I’m the one who want you now- I’m the one who wants you now
Get dress-Get dressed
Master Lee is almost died now- he is almost dead my dear
Please protect my sister at all course-cost
And FIVE years old-and five year olds
Honey there is a lot of typos. I know you want to put it all in while it’s still in your HEAD but please check after you’re done.

Description & Emotions: 10/10
You describe the emotions very well.

Format (Graphics & Layout): 10/10
It’s readable and neat and not too many graphics that would ruin the whole point of the story.

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
I say it is a really good story and I really liked it.

Total: 89/100 //B (+)
It’s really good.Just remember to check after you’ve typed everything out.I know I am supposed to focus on plot and characters but I just can’t help myself with the vocabulary and grammar.

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