Title: 10 points

I like the simplicity of your title.  I especially like how the imposter is still unclear; the readers know that someone is lying, but it hasn’t been revealed yet.  Good job!

Description: 15 points

Again, I like the simplicity.  You aren’t revealing too much, but at the same time, you write just enough to hook the readers. 

Foreword:

Since you only have trailers and credits in your foreword, which is perfectly fine, I will omit this section from the total score.

Presentation: 13 points

The layout in the foreword is a little messy, but I do like the chapter layout.  The posters don’t exactly line up, and there’s a little too much text aligned in the center.

Spelling & Grammar: 12 points

Since English is your first language, I will be a little more picky in this section.

The one thing that stands out the most is your tense errors.  You often switch between present and past tense.  An example of this is in Chapter 45, when you write:

Original: She was suffering and he cannot even do anything about it.

Fixed: She was suffering, and he couldn’t even do anything about it.

I personally would stick to past tense, since past is a little easier to write than present tense, but it’s your choice.

For spelling, you switch between So Yeon and Se Yeon.  In Chapter 34, you even switch between the two spellings in the same chapter.  Since she is a character who appears more than once, it is important that you pick one spelling and stick with it.

Otherwise, spelling is fine, with an occasional misspelled word here or there.

Finally, one small thing I wanted to point out was that there’s a difference between fiancée and fiancé.  Fiancée is a woman engaged to be married, while a fiancé is a man engaged to be married. 

Style: 20 points

Word choice: You use a lot of bigger words, which is fine, but you need to provide context for those words, or else it sounds like you’ve opened a thesaurus and inserted random words to sound more intelligent.  In this case, less is more.  If you want to read more about this, here is a post that explains it better.

Imagery: You tend to reuse descriptions for emotions.  For example, anger is always “seeing red”.  Try to change it up a bit as you continue to write.

Dialogue: Your dialogue can get a little awkward at times.  I would recommend reading it aloud, which would help get rid of the awkwardness.

Symbols: My favorite symbol was the Barbie doll in Chapter 24, hands down.  Whether intentional or not (some of the best symbols are unintentionally written), it was clever and fitting of the situation.

Foreshadowing: You do a really well with foreshadowing.  Looking back through the beginning chapters, I wondered how I missed all of the hints the first time.  Good job!

Flow: 19 points

The beginning went a little too slow in terms of plot progression, but now that almost everything is out in the open, I like the pace at which you’re going.

Characterization: 40 points

Your characters are some of the strongest I’ve ever read in a fanfic.  Although incomplete, I like the progression and hope that you continue to develop your characters.

Chae Won: She possesses a child-like innocence, but she knows when to stand up to herself.  I like her backbone.  When Chae Won hurts, I sympathize with her, which means that you’ve done a really good job of making her relatable. 

Joong Ki: I loved the realization he had when he decided that he liked Chae Won, even if she wasn’t the “real” Chae Won.  It marked a turning point for his character and made him feel real instead of a tool for other Chae Won’s plan.

Shi Hoo: Shi Hoo’s character made it almost impossible to redeem himself in both Chae Won’s and the reader’s eyes, but he did.  Although his actions are in no way justified and his sense of justice is extremely wrong, he is improving at the chapters continue.

Other Chae Won: She’s the standard antagonist except a little more insane.  The readers don’t know much about her, but there is potential for her to become an interesting antagonist with a story of her own.  Keep this in mind as you continue to write.

Chae Won’s Dad: I do like that he has a reason for disliking Chae Won.  I liked how you added in that bit about Chae Won’s dad’s personality in the past.

Plot: 60 points

The plot starts off pretty standard, with a girl who wakes up in a hospital with no idea of who she is.  It’s a parallel to Nice Guy’s plot, where Moon Chae Won’s character gets amnesia.

Nonetheless, the way you delivered the plot was quite effective.

The confession at Minyoung’s party and the revelation of the second Chae Won were some of the most intriguing and shocking scenes.

The two proposals that Chae Won received in Chapter 35 seemed a little too rushed.  If you decide to edit, you might want to consider adding a longer transition between the two scenes.

Otherwise, there isn’t much I can say about the plot except that you’ve done a wonderful job of telling this story so far.  For future chapters, I would just keep in mind the questions that have yet to be answered. 

Overall: no points here

I read this in one sitting, believe it or not, and I couldn’t bring myself to stop.  Congratulations on scoring a 90%!

Thank you for requesting a review, and I’m sorry that it took so long!

Total: 189/210 -> 90%