Chapter 3: Love the story and I'm really sorry to say that but the English in that fanfiction is terrible. The sentences don't make sense so the reader has to figure out everything and the words are written in a bad form. For example ''"Did Onew hyung knows about that?" Said Jonghyun oppa.'' The sentence is structured wrong. It should be ''Does Onew Hyung know about that?'' You could change the 'said' to 'Jonghyun-Oppa asked surprised''. This would create a better understanding of what the characters feel. More descriptive writing would allow the character to get more involved in to the story so he/she would feel more like part of it. Cheers xxx
Chapter 48: author nim ^^
stay and be strong HWAITING!!
take care of yourself
i know what its like losing someone you love :'(
im pretty sure your boyfriend will be watching over you in heaven
SARANGHAE AUTHOR NIM STAY STRONG :D. <3
take your time unnie..... fighting... i know how it fells to lose someone you love from cancer... i really do... i felt the same way when i lost my family member from cancer.
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