Review by: MyReaction

Title: (4/5)
I thought your title was pretty catchy. It made me wonder what she meant by that... >:D 

Description: (8/10)
Your description, it was simple. Very simple. Yet, it was also...intriguing. I liked the words they exchanged. You really showed that the girl, aka "you", was a cold person. :)

Plot: (21/30)
Well, your plot was somewhat overused. Boys transferring to schools, living with/next to/near the girl. Very cliche. And I thought that the girl hating the boys at first, then ending up loving them, is also cliche. Mianhae, its just that I see these similar plots a lot.
Plus, it was a bit...confusing to read, you rushed a bit.

Characters: (16/20)
It felt like all your characters were similar. Every member in EXO-K had a "deadly" side to them. I thought that the characters needed to be bit more 3D and have a little more variety to them. But I think that "you" was developed pretty well, and I could see that she was the "Ice Princess", if you know what I mean.

Flow: (12/15)
Er, your flow was a bit hard to understand. It was a bit...choppy, but generally, I could understand it. I also like how you dont rush everything that happens. You took your time to show that Suho was angry so he decided to threaten Minyoung; you described it well.

Grammar: (7/10)
You had the basics down for grammar; I understand that English is not your first language. Nothing more to say. xD

Writing style: (7/10)
Your writing style was okay. I enjoyed reading the characters thoughts; they were pretty interesting. >:3 One tip, though, is that when two people are talking back and forth, you dont have to say "he/she said" after every quote. I'm sure your readers will know.

Bonus - 7 points
Wow, the graphics were really nice. Really. And the poster and background matched very well. There isn't much more I can say, except that reading your story wasn't blinding to my eyes like the others. The dark colored background really helped my eyes to concentrate on the text. :)

Overall Enjoyment:
Your story, it was really interesting. I looked forward to the moment when the main character would realize that she really loved EXO-K. 
Once again, I found "you" 's thoughts hilarious to read. They made me crack up. Especially the one in Chapter 4 where she thinks, "Stupid guard. If I seeing your face again, I will chopped your body and let the bird eat you." My mom was staring. xP
I'd like to see which boy she ends up with. :D

Total Score: 85

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