The introduction did indeed stick out to me; you went into deep detail; but maybe you should add how exactly it fell? or what caused it to fall? But it gave off the mind and emotion grabbing vibe!

I love the introduction! It was not hard to read as well as not to in my face. It flowed together very nicely, and everything seemed to click well in place. Some people would have a hard time seeing it if the text was to small!

Like I mentioned in the introduction; how exactly did it fall? Maybe give a year and a time? This is for the description leading into the story, you want to make sure to really grab the reader! 

But I do like the little metaphoric poem you used as well to describe between two character!

I have seen many stories with the term 'chasing' in it; but you gave it an entirely new defintion as well as meaning. It really caught my attention and made me desire to see more.

However; do not be afraid to take risk's and even translate either storm or chasing into another language; it may catch the reader's eyes- and seek interest. You did not over do it either!

I was interested to see what kind of metaphoric connection the story had; and I was very imrpessed! The title did connect; and flow together nicely into the story. Some people just toss on a random title!

7/10

When I observed the story; I did indeed like the poster; it was not to brightly colored nor in my face; it flowed together and connected into your genre. It did not stick out like a sore thumb! However; what about the background?

I was kind of withdrawn and second guessed because of how there was no background; it made me re