Boite Le Diamond~ Baekies
Light Livid Dreams: A Review Shop (Open) (Batch 2~)
Boite Le Diamond
By :Baekies
REVIEWER'S NOTE
I am so sorry for getting to this request late; I understand if you are slightly disappointed in me chingu, but here! <3
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introduction (2/5)
I did not exactly understand the way this happened. Not to sound to harsh or violent, but how exactly did Jongin get dibs on Luhan? What made Oh Sehun want to move and write in Paris?
This is the questions I had reading your introduction. It somewhat confused me chinguya, but it was still interesting. You left some pretty good cliff hangers and let the reader know they have to find out for themselves.
However, you should probably give a sneak peak or preview on how and why this happened- maybe in Lu Han's pespective or Sehun's.
BASIC SUMMARY (4/5)
I get that Sehun's father does not want him to be an author. How come? Why does he hate it so very much? I know he wants more and thinks higher for him, but is there another reason?
Of all historic places, why Paris? I do like however, that you want expand your story to some place different. I have never read a story where it takes place in France.
For example in the 'first' prologue chapter, you may want to give a slight hint on how Lu Han died. Or how he really feels about it, but it is just a suggestion.
TITLE ORIGINALITY (10/10)
When it comes to this title, I absolutely was in love with this! It is stunning and definitely eye catching! I have never seen a different title used for a story. I believe it to be French, correct? It is very fitting.
Since it takes place in France, the title translates to Box Diamond, or Box of Diamonds? I apologize if I am wrong.. But the point is, it fits and exposes how everything fits together.
Many people would stick with english and make it boring, but you gave it your own creative style!
PRESENTATION OF STORY (5/10)
I will begin with the poster and the background of the story. It is amazing and beautiful! I enjoyed looking at it. It wasn't to in my
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