It Began With A Dance- BebopChan
Light Livid Dreams: A Review Shop (Open) (Batch 2~)it Began With A Dance
date
1/14/18
—
kitty
chapters: 29 story link
It Began With a Dance
INTRODUCTION
2/5
BASIC SUMMARY
3/5
TITLE ORIGINALITY
5/10
PRESENTATION OF STORY
7/10
CHAPTER FLOW
19/20
PLOT
17/20
25/30
CHARACTERS
30/30
GRAMMAR
40/40
GENERAL ENJOYMENT
50/50
Welcome to Livid Dream's Review skills!
scroll down
introduction: 2/5 The introduction for this story does not seem that attention grabbing. I was sort of confused and had a few questions I had to keep asking myself. How did they have the powers? What kinds of powers? Who's the strongest? Why are they abandoned - are the parents dead? You may want to be a little more descriptive on how and why they got these powers. It does leave suspsense, but I was still confused. Also, what year does this take place? keep in mind, this is the intro to your story, not the entire story as a whole. The little not you gave about it being your first ff, it is sweet but not needed neccasarily. It gives everyone a heads up that indeed you do, but it is still very interesting. the appearance of your story is very amazing, and pieced together perfectly.
basic summary 4/5
The basic summary of this story is very well put together and flows together nicely, for your first fanfiction. I like how you do everyone's backstory and where they are located, in every chapter. I enjoyed how you also go into detail on their connections with each other.
The tags also fit the story very well, I wasn't cut off and utterly shocked and disappointed that you didn't stray away. The story flowed together, and amateur authors, I was very impressed by how you kept everything tired together collectively!
TITLE ORIGINALITY: 5/10
The title wasn't very orginial in my opinion sadly, there has been many stories with the same tittle or realtively close to it. Don't be afraid to give your title your own flavor; but it does indeed fit with your story!
Example Titles: Legendary Abilities, Rising Against Fame
PRESENTATION OF STORY: 7/10
I really enjoyed the way you presented this story, mainly the way it is beautif
Comments