Basic Summary & Introduction- 10-10:

Okay, I combined the Introduction and Basic Summary because the summary would’ve just been the triggers—

One thing that really threw me off (a good thing, so don’t worry) is that the story seemed more Minho-centered, yet the intro was about Taemin. I like it, because you expect to start off with poor Taemin being neglected, but instead you get a frowny-Minho who’s upset because he has to move. It throws that unexpected first chapter at you, but somehow, I think it fits the story (if that makes sense-).

And thanks for the triggers. :)

Title Originality- 5.5-10:

The one thing that isn’t going to get as many points as the others is your title originality. While I do think it portrays your story well, it’s just not very original. 

Neatness / Presentation of Story- 10-10:

Like the plot, the font and spacing and everything was very simple. Nothing too fancy. For me, it kinda added a creepy feeling to the story.

Chapter Flow- 20-20:

I love those pov switches between Minho and Taemin. I was kinda expecting for the pov to revolve around Minho since he seemed like more of a main-character after I read the first chapter, so I was surprised to go to the next chapter and see Taemin’s name. Plus, those time skips make everything better :3

I don’t know… I have a thing for time skips…

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