Passing 
 smiles 02/16/18
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SUGALGI
1 chapter
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scroll down INTRODUCTION

5/5 BASIC SUMMARY

5/5 TITLE ORIGINALITY

10/10 PRESENTATION OF STORY

9/10 CHAPTER FLOW

20/20 PLOT

20/20

30/30 CHARACTERS

30/30 GRAMMAR

38/40 GENERAL ENJOYMENT

50/50 COMMENTS
scroll down introduction the introduction intrigued me. even if it was a bit cloudy, it still gave me a little bit of an idea of what the plot would be like (although the plot twist really blew me- that would be a comment for later though). i like how you include the quote: the sky is tragically beautiful, it's a graveyard of stars. it is quite ironic since the skies are where the stars lie turns to be very beautiful; yet it is where the souls of the dead stays in which it is supposed to be dull and the exact opposite of beauty.

i aslo liked how you gave an advance warning for the readers who are not fond of angst. and to those who absolutely loved angst, it serves as a preparation befre they get to read your story (which in my case, it took me a lot of time to prepare because it's been a long time since i've read an angst genre fic)   basic summary your summer is simple yet straight to the point. you didn't go to the descriptive type however you made it very clear that this story would fall into a tragic ending and not the cliched happy one like in the fairy tales.   TITLE ORIGINALITY i haven't encountered a single story that has the same title as yours, so i'd say it's rather unique. it also intrigued me since it didn't gave me a whole idea of what the story is about which is why it made me want to read your story!   PRESENTATION OF STORY it's a great point that you decided to add a background music to feel the atmosphere once you start reading the story. i have to say, your plan worked in trying to achieve the angst vibe while reading. your poster is also breathtaking to look at, the vibe definitely screams angst !! the turn of events definitely confused me but it all makes sense at the end. as i read the middle part, i was definitely confused as to why tiffany told taeyeon to be happy and not expect her to come back everytime the older misses her. once i entered the middle part though, where in it turns out to be some sort of flashback, it made me realized as to why tiffany told her those sentences. i have to read the first few parts again to understand it but in the end, i defintely enjoyed the first few moments of confusion.   CHAPTER FLOW it took me a while to figure out what score i should give you with the chapter flow; but the main reason why i gave it a perfect score is because of the impact it gave me when i entered the . literally, it shocked me and believe me when i say this, my jaw literally went open. also, the first few parts of the final chapter is somewhat happy, innocent and just pure love. however, the sadness dawned to me at the middle part, wherein i felt