if you're on mobile, please rotate your screen for a better and comfortable view ^^

I like your introduction since it basically gave this vibe to the reader wherein they'll be curious on what the story is really all about. Although you mentioned in the intro that there would be some sort of love triangle going on, you still made a plot twist of your own where one of the two boys and the female main character are having dreams about each other and hearing voices.

My only issue about this which is why I gave you only 2 is your grammar. Now I have thought that maybe English is not your native tongue which is understandable since English is definitely not an easy language to study and perfect but you still lack the basics in grammar such as tenses of verbs, dependent and independent clauses and the like. Grammar is pretty much important in a story because this can lead to a few misunderstandings to the reader if you use the wrong form of words.

You can use this as an example:

"Two souls are getting together. Both have an unknown past. Blurry dreams are seen and undestinguished and weird voices are heard. A boy is falling in love with a certain girl however he couldn't pinpoint the reason why, thus he decided to solve this problem on his own. This story has so many unexpected moments and forms a love triangle wherein two boys fight for the girl's only heart. This girl, however, is innocent and nervous. They say that true love never breaks and not even time can defeat that. It would stay as un unbreakable rope from the past until the end of time."

I was confused with your summary because I expect the summaries given to me are actual summaries. A summary is basicallly the whole plot that was explained with only a paragraph. So I expected that the summary you would give to me is already complete wherein I get to see what would really happen frpom the start to the end. The only thing you gave me however is the starting and somewhat middle point of your story.

My view of a summary can be different with the other reviewers here but it's because the basic summary would help me and I'll treat it as a guide if the flow is starting to go farther to the storyline or are you on the right track.

I still haven't encountered stories with this kind of title so I gave you a high grade. I'm only worried about the sense and connection of the title to your story since I haven't seen any idea, focus or event wherein this person is stuck with this kind of person yet.

Then again, your story isn't finished yet so I'll just have to wait and see. Just a note that your title has to be connected to your story or else it would only confuse the readers.

The presentation of your story in terms of the thought is quite nice. I like how you decided to add quotes of the characters in your foreword in which it can attract the readers to read more about your story.

I suggest for you to change the design of the "character's POV" in order to stand out more. You can use bold, italics or both so that the readers can differentiate the POV from the thoughts of the character itself. And also, there should be a consistency between the names if you're going to mention a character's POV. If you want just the first name, then all of them should be first names. If you want to have both the surname and the first name, then the rest should have the same layout as well.

For example:

Jungkook's POV;

- his point of view-

Taejin's POV;

- her point of view-

Taehyung's POV;

- his point of view -

or

Jeon Jungkook's POV;

- his point of view -

Kim Taehyung's POV;

- his point of view -

The poster is also very pretty and catchy. I like the vibrant colors of the texts and somewhat looks like a graffiti.

And also, I suggest for you to italicized, remove the quation marks and place a comma after for the thoughts of the character in order for readers to differentiate the dialogues from the thoughts.

For example:

From Chapter 1

BEFORE : "Oh gods, please save me from those creatures" I wished and went into the classroom. There was no one in class.