we belong together
written by fefedove
reviewed by -ericsnams

Title: 9/10
Upon first reading your title, I was actually thinking that the story was probably going to be something angty(-ish) or romance-y, which turned out to be very much wrong, but it’s definitely not bad! I see the link between the title and your story’s content, so that’s good!

Plot: 14/25

                4/10: Setting
                Nothing much happens in this section, but I am however also aware that setting isn’t exactly the main focal point - and to be honest, I doubt it would help your story move forward if it was, taking the context into consideration.

                4/5: Originality
                Reading your description, I actually didn’t think this would score as high on the originality-chart because I just thought it would be a oneshot collection like so many others - but /boy was I in for a surprise/. The very concept isn’t that unusual, I reckon it all comes down to a question of looking closely through the tag filters of the internet, but the content is… Definitely new to me, and that’s not /only/ because I don’t really read EXO stories.

                6/10: Believability
                Correct me if I’m wrong, but I have a very strong feeling the believability isn’t the most important concept in this thing - after all, it’s s and es (peni???) with thoughts and feelings, and a car that turns into a person; it’s supposed to seem very unreal. But the unbelievability is very believable, I’ll give you that!

Characterization: 14/35

                5/5: Presentation
                The presentation of the characters in these small drabbles are actually pretty substantial - I’d probably frown upon it if they weren’t, because the unique situations in which Tao and Sehun find themselves kind of imply that you’ll need some kind of background information before diving into the whole thing. But you’ve managed to do it pretty well, and I’m very happy about that.

Fun fact, I’m so innocent (not really, but let’s pretend for a while that I am, yeah?) that I thought the recap of the first drabble was meant in a metaphorical way all the way until I actually got around to read the description (school has scarred me, everything is a metaphor!!!!!).

                4/10: Development
                Because each chapter portrays a different story, there isn’t really much to talk about development-wise as a whole entity. But discussing your drabbles as single pieces of work, there’s a sense of consistency in what you do, although I have a feeling that you maybe didn’t write this with character development in mind - which is fine, because I recognize this story is not meant to be extremely well-articulated in terms of what kind of characters you use.

                5/20: Diversity/Purpose
                This section was actually kind of hard, because other than serving as a comic relief in some cases where the situation calls for it, the purpose of your characters wasn’t that clear to me. I’m only allowing myself to tell you this in the way that I do because you’ve made it clear that it’s a crack story, and if you feel like I’m skating over some things superficially, please tell me!

Writing Style: 28/30

                10/10: Narration
                I really like your narration - you keep a steady pace and get the important stuff explained in a relatively simple manner, and I feel like there’s some underlying humor in your words and explanations, which I really like. It’s like sarcasm or irony, but in a nice and friendly-minded way. Amazing!

                8/10: Consistency/Flow
                As previously mentioned, your individual stories have some kind of consistency within them, although I reckon it can be very hard with such relatively short space to do it, so I salute you! Good job!

                10/10: Spelling/Grammar
                I really don’t want to give you the impression that I think your story’s just for s and giggles, because I don’t. I actually think you have something good and fun going on for you here, and your readers seem to think the same thing, so no matter how this turns out to score, keep in mind that your readers are happy - that’s gotta count for something, right?

When it comes to your spelling, I can’t really find anything that’s off. Your language really brings your stories to life, and if there /are/ any mistakes, my guess is that they’re so small and insignificant that they can easily be corrected by a quick once-over before posting your drabbles.

TOTAL: 65/100