Blue Blood
written by KangminBread
reviewed by TimelessStories

Title: 10/10
I think that the title is very fitting despite me not understanding what it meant before I got to reading the story. The term "Blue blood" is a smart way to catagorize your characters.

Plot: 30/35

                5/5: Originality
                I haven't read a lot of zombie or apocalypse stories or fanfics. But I think you did stick out some compared to those few I have read and seen. Just because of the Blue blood thing and the people that are immune.

                8/10: Believability
                I think the story progresses a little too fast and that somethings that happens for instance how easily Yongwoon trust Sungmin despite them barely knowing each other. But over all the believability is good.

                8/10: Narration
                Because there is a lot of characters it gets a little confusing at times but I over all, think the narration is just fine.

                9/10: Setting
                Though I don't read these kind of stories/ fics a lot I think you told the readers what they needed to know.

Characterization: 23/35

                8/10: Development
                Though there is character development I think it progresses a little too fast. It seems rushed.

                3/5: Presentation
                You don't really tell the reader how the character looks aside from their clothes at some points. Try to add more descriptions on your characters, what kind of aura do they give off? How do they look?

                2/10: Diversity
                To me the characters seemed pretty much the same, there wasn't really anything that made them seem different aside from the blue blood thing. The way you wrote them made them all kind of blend together unfortunately. 

                10/10: Purpose
                The characters you used all had a purpose in the story. They just all felt like they read like the same character.

Writing Style: 19/20

                10/10: Spelling/Grammar
                Your English is good and so is your spelling!

                4/5: Consistency
                Sometimes it seems rushed like I said above but I still think you have a good consistency.

                5/5: Flow
                You make the story flow nicely.

TOTAL: 82/100

There is certain things you can become better at but the story is already good as it is. But it can be better if you add some more details about how the characters look and perhaps act into it. 
Maybe I'm weird or I feel like certain parts seemed rushed or that the story progressed too fast. Maybe try to plan it more before hand.
 
Hopefully you don't take my review and constructive criticism too harshly! (I'm kind of new to this whole reviewing stuff :)