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The Library Review Shop (CLOSED)An Angel Devil
written by SimpleSpecial
reviewed by kpopandkdramas
Title: 10/10
The title fits with the story. One minute Baekhyun is being an adorable, and nice “boyfriend” and a minute later he’s just rude. Not only was it Baekhyun but the main character herself was like that. The story is really cute in that kind of sense. As I continued to read I could see how that title really fit within the story line.
Plot: 25/35
2/5: Originality
It wasn’t completely original as it was a typical plot. Two people hate each other. One of them likes the other, but the other doesn’t, and in the end that end up going out. In that kind of sense it wasn’t that original.
8/10: Believability
I was able to see it play out in my head; however I thought it needed a bit detail because the story moved a bit too quickly.
8/10: Narration
It was interesting to read it from a first person view because I’m not used to it. But I felt that the narration was a bit bumpy. The main characters thought weren’t really clear and she seemed to change her thoughts and feelings really quickly. If you were to transition her feelings a bit more smoothly than the narration would be better.
7/10: Setting
There were a quite a few scenes that I didn’t know where the characters were and there were no transition that indicated where they were. I felt that the setting was a bumpy because I didn’t know where they were some of the time I was reading. However, most of the time I was able to picture where they were.
Characterization: 27/35
6/10: Development
I’m still not aware of the main character's personality that well. Since it’s from a first person view I think you should develop her a bit better. Maybe just add in a few details about her likes and dislikes. Baekhyun is also one of the characters you need to work one because his characterization is a bit confusing in the sense that we (the readers) don’t really know much about him. I understand that there aren’t that many chapters, but since the main character likes him we should get to know more about Baekhyun as a person.
5/5: Presentation
I loved how you introduced Baekhyun as a . From the stories that I;ve read with him as a character he was the sweet one, but seeing this side of him is interesting.
6/10: Diversity
It seems that Baekhyun and the main character has the same personality. I think you should distinguish them a bit more because guys and girls act differently. I didn’t really see diversity within the characters, with the exception of Sehun.
10/10: Purpose
There was a purpose for all the characters. The main character, Baekhyun and Sehun, all played a part with in the story line.
Writing Style: 16/20
6/10: Spelling/Grammar
There was a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. I had to read some parts of the story twice in order to completely understand what you were saying.
5/5: Consistency and 3/5: Flow
Again, there were a couple parts in the story that were bumpy and transitioned quickly. It jumps around a lot and it confused me for the most part.
TOTAL: 78/100
I enjoyed the story; however, the story too quickly and i felt that you could put more details with into it. The grammar really did messed me up a lot when I was reading your story so I think you should go back through the story and look for grammar mistakes. Overall the story was really fun to read.
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