✌REVIEW - Postponing All Answers (by amusingmurdermachine)

✔✔TRAVERSE SHOP - REVIEW & PROOFREAD✔✔
 
 
 
 
Story title:
Genre(s):
Slice of Life
Angst
Story Status:
Completed
No.of Chapters:
1
Category:
Oneshot
Total Points:
38/45
 
TITLE: 4/5
The title (hopefully this time) is unique, although I do not see the connection between the story itself (wait what). A bit interesting and eye-catching too.
DESCRIPTION/FOREWORD: 9/10
The description is very intruiging, although it's short (but it's a oneshot, so it's okay). Both the Description and the Foreword are clean and neatly done, except some grammatical errors here and there.
PLOT: 8/10
I do not see any external conflict here in the story, but I see some internal conflict (inside Chanyeol's mind). There's not much happening around, and the conflict isn't solved either in the end. This has the potential to become a multi-chaptered story.
WRITING STYLE: 5/5
The writing's style is neat, and descriptive writing were used very good. I see that you put your story's tense in the present instead of the past (which is commonly used), since I rarely see this type of writing style.
Grammar: 4/5
I can't spot any grammatical errors within the story, but there is in your Foreword and your chapter title (Needs to be capitalized).
Satisfaction: 8/10
It could have been bettter if you sort of continued the story, since us, the readers are left with more questions than answers. The story is intriguing so I definitely enjoyed reading it :)
 
 
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WhisperOfTheSea #1
Would you like to be affies?
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1158939/
Sparked_Imperfection #2
Author(s): Sparked_Imperfection
Story Title: Storytime with Kym
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1144996/storytime-with-kym-collection-horror-originalcharacter-compilation
Story Status: Ongoing
No. of Chapters: 2 (May add more while you are doing this ^^")
Genre(s): Mixed (Currently Horror and Anti-Romance (?))
Review/Proofread/Both: Review
Additional Notes: You may feel the story has no backstory. That's because these are scenes, not whole stories.
AlienDongsaeng #3
Author(s): AlienDongsaeng
Story Title: Lucky To Be Unlucky
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1136588
Story Status: Completed
No. of Chapters: 3
Genre(s): Comedy, Fluff
Review/Proofread/Both: Both
Additional Notes: Had a hard time writing this. My laptop broke down... Couldn't check for grammar mistakes. HELP
MirrorGirl #4
Author(s): MirrorGirl
Story Title: Mates
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1138620/mates-fantasy-romance-exo-baekhyun-werewolf-xiumin-wolfau
Story Status: ongoing
No. of Chapters: 5 (For now)
Genre(s): fantasy, abused and romance
Review/Proofread/Both: Review
Additional Notes: thank you for your time! I'm not sure how many chapters are gonna be up by the time you review the story though. Thus, the (for now)
Angst_hyung #5
Author(s): Kookie025
Story Title: Jikook Oneshot Challenge ♡♡♡
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1131795/jikook-oneshot-challenge-hiatus-oneshot-jimin-bts-jungkook-jikook
Story Status: ongoing (hiatus)
No. of Chapters: 18
Brief Summary: Just a collection of Jikook Stories~~
Genre(s): Mostly angst, romance, fluff, humour, fantast, etc.
Review/Proofread/Both: Proofread
Additional Notes: thank you so much sarangheeee~~
Angst_hyung #6
Unnie~~ Can I request for proofread? I'll request now~ sarangheeeeeee
k4ryss4 #7
Chapter 41: Wow, thank you so much for your review! It really made me realise my mistakes. I'm kind of conflicted between making Chanyeol really happy or writing the whole story as perfect in grammar as I could (because his passion is writing and all), which isn't really the point of a diary. I'll take your suggestions into consideration and I'll definitely rewrite some parts of the chapters I've posted. Thank you so much!! <3 <3 <3 <3

P.S. Yeah, it's pre-planned(ish) because I really like to plan my stories and I don't know why .-. (ish because I still don't know how I'm going to write the conflict scenes and , or if I'm going to stick with the conflict I thought of when I was planning lmao)
AlienDongsaeng #8
Chapter 42: Btw, ALICEEEE!!
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