✌REVIEW - The Single Girl. (by karmachameleon)

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Story title:
Author(s):
Genre(s):
Romance
Fluff
Story Status:
Completed
No.of Chapters:
26
Category:
Multi-Chaptered
Total Points:
54/60
 
TITLE: 3/5
I find the title a bit...dull. It doesn't much catch the reader's attention. (unless they're up for layxoc xD). If I saw a title like this, I wouldn't bother checking it out. It's not overly unique, and not overused either. I guess it's just average. They would've missed a well-written story if they wouldn't read it :(
DESCRIPTION/FOREWORD: 9/10
I find nothing wrong in the description even though you revealed Hana's personality and characteristics, and I see that it is essential and notmentioned in the story afterwards. But I find some repeated info (e.g. the detail about Baekhyun getting engaged to Soojung) that is repeated/mentioned again in the later chapters. Details in the description needn't to be repeated again in the story, heck, that's why you put it in the description, because there's no room for it in the story.

I lol'ed at the Foreword when I saw my username. Guess you're using the you tag? And thanks for the warning! Tbh, the story is not all that cringey, though I find some moments cringeworthy (or is it just me lol)
PLOT: 10/10
I'd give the plot 10/10! The plot's unique and original, but there are some plotholes that I spot (e.g. in Chapter 12, how the hell did Hana get his address? And no, she was drunk when he brought her to his home back in Chapter 5.)

I love the plot twists especially in Chapter 22. I didn't expect that.
Flow of the Story: 4/5
Chapter 5 and there's already happening. I was like, "Woah... that was fast," the kiss would be acceptable but dammit Yixing! What have you done?!"

I guess that's a bit rushed for me since I don't usually read s that much.

And I think Chapter 22 (or chapter 23?) was a bit rushed also. I was hoping to see some scene where Hana wakes up from the accident, but no...
CHARACTERS: 10/10
I must say, you really did a great job of shaping the characters' personalities and characteristics! The characterization's also good! I noticed that you mainly show their character through what the characters think of this certain person.

I see that there are definitely some character development going on (e.g. Lay opening up to Hana and his stoic personality expalined later in the story, Soojung's sudden dislike for Hana I guess that's just jealousy lol)
WRITING STYLE: 5/5
I find nothing wrong with your writing style. And I see that you are fond of using simple, short sentences only.
Grammar: 4/5
There are some minor grammatical errors and some minor spelling issues.
Satisfaction: 9/10
All in all, I was pleased with the ending and the epilogue. I was sad that this story have to end so soon T_T (22 chapters are too short for me). Sequel, anyone? Though it's chances of happening is as high as my chances of marrying Jisoo; it will not happen. Since the conflict's been resolved... unless...
 
 
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WhisperOfTheSea #1
Would you like to be affies?
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1158939/
Sparked_Imperfection #2
Author(s): Sparked_Imperfection
Story Title: Storytime with Kym
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1144996/storytime-with-kym-collection-horror-originalcharacter-compilation
Story Status: Ongoing
No. of Chapters: 2 (May add more while you are doing this ^^")
Genre(s): Mixed (Currently Horror and Anti-Romance (?))
Review/Proofread/Both: Review
Additional Notes: You may feel the story has no backstory. That's because these are scenes, not whole stories.
AlienDongsaeng #3
Author(s): AlienDongsaeng
Story Title: Lucky To Be Unlucky
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1136588
Story Status: Completed
No. of Chapters: 3
Genre(s): Comedy, Fluff
Review/Proofread/Both: Both
Additional Notes: Had a hard time writing this. My laptop broke down... Couldn't check for grammar mistakes. HELP
MirrorGirl #4
Author(s): MirrorGirl
Story Title: Mates
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1138620/mates-fantasy-romance-exo-baekhyun-werewolf-xiumin-wolfau
Story Status: ongoing
No. of Chapters: 5 (For now)
Genre(s): fantasy, abused and romance
Review/Proofread/Both: Review
Additional Notes: thank you for your time! I'm not sure how many chapters are gonna be up by the time you review the story though. Thus, the (for now)
Angst_hyung #5
Author(s): Kookie025
Story Title: Jikook Oneshot Challenge ♡♡♡
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1131795/jikook-oneshot-challenge-hiatus-oneshot-jimin-bts-jungkook-jikook
Story Status: ongoing (hiatus)
No. of Chapters: 18
Brief Summary: Just a collection of Jikook Stories~~
Genre(s): Mostly angst, romance, fluff, humour, fantast, etc.
Review/Proofread/Both: Proofread
Additional Notes: thank you so much sarangheeee~~
Angst_hyung #6
Unnie~~ Can I request for proofread? I'll request now~ sarangheeeeeee
k4ryss4 #7
Chapter 41: Wow, thank you so much for your review! It really made me realise my mistakes. I'm kind of conflicted between making Chanyeol really happy or writing the whole story as perfect in grammar as I could (because his passion is writing and all), which isn't really the point of a diary. I'll take your suggestions into consideration and I'll definitely rewrite some parts of the chapters I've posted. Thank you so much!! <3 <3 <3 <3

P.S. Yeah, it's pre-planned(ish) because I really like to plan my stories and I don't know why .-. (ish because I still don't know how I'm going to write the conflict scenes and , or if I'm going to stick with the conflict I thought of when I was planning lmao)
AlienDongsaeng #8
Chapter 42: Btw, ALICEEEE!!
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