The title's average, not quite unique but not overused either. For me though, it's not eye-catching.
DESCRIPTION/FOREWORD: 8/10
The description is good, I have nothing much to say. Perhaps if the title doesn't catch the reader's attention, the description will, since it raises some questions in the readers' curious minds.
Though I'm not fond of snippets from the story placed in the foreword, it's also finely made.
PLOT: 7/10
There are many minor conflicts throughout the story, but I can't see the main conflict of the story. And I can see that your story falls under the category of Slice of Life. I can see that you just made these little scenarios just to show the readers the answer to the 3 questions in the Description (Guess who helps them together? Guess who is her superhero? Guess who loves her more than anyone else?)The ending's sweet af Taehyung let me be your sibliiiing!
WRITING STYLE: 4/5
Though I can't see much of the descriptive writing, you showed us every characters' action, so that can make up for it. The writing style is perfect, not too short and not too wordy and I also liked your choice of words :)
Grammar: 3/5
Minor grammatical errors (unnecessary apostorphe's, misplaced words), and spelling errors.
Satisfaction: 8/10
There's not much going on in the story as it's like snippets from everday life, but I enjoyed reading it :)
Author(s): Sparked_Imperfection
Story Title: Storytime with Kym
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1144996/storytime-with-kym-collection-horror-originalcharacter-compilation
Story Status: Ongoing
No. of Chapters: 2 (May add more while you are doing this ^^")
Genre(s): Mixed (Currently Horror and Anti-Romance (?))
Review/Proofread/Both: Review
Additional Notes: You may feel the story has no backstory. That's because these are scenes, not whole stories.
Author(s): AlienDongsaeng
Story Title: Lucky To Be Unlucky
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1136588
Story Status: Completed
No. of Chapters: 3
Genre(s): Comedy, Fluff
Review/Proofread/Both: Both
Additional Notes: Had a hard time writing this. My laptop broke down... Couldn't check for grammar mistakes. HELP
Author(s): MirrorGirl
Story Title: Mates
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1138620/mates-fantasy-romance-exo-baekhyun-werewolf-xiumin-wolfau
Story Status: ongoing
No. of Chapters: 5 (For now)
Genre(s): fantasy, abused and romance
Review/Proofread/Both: Review
Additional Notes: thank you for your time! I'm not sure how many chapters are gonna be up by the time you review the story though. Thus, the (for now)
Chapter 41: Wow, thank you so much for your review! It really made me realise my mistakes. I'm kind of conflicted between making Chanyeol really happy or writing the whole story as perfect in grammar as I could (because his passion is writing and all), which isn't really the point of a diary. I'll take your suggestions into consideration and I'll definitely rewrite some parts of the chapters I've posted. Thank you so much!! <3 <3 <3 <3
P.S. Yeah, it's pre-planned(ish) because I really like to plan my stories and I don't know why .-. (ish because I still don't know how I'm going to write the conflict scenes and , or if I'm going to stick with the conflict I thought of when I was planning lmao)
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